When You're In Love

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AdamHarkus

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« on: March 13, 2017, 03:49:24 PM »
I'd love to hear your thought's on this.

It's one of those I'm about 99% sure I've heard before, but I don't know where from, although those are sometimes the best ones. It was done and dusted in 30 minutes too, one of those thats writes itself.

I was stuck in a bit of rut and had an idea to do a waltz in 3/4 rather than the usual folky 4/4 fare.

Hopefully it's put across the idea of a romantic ballroom dance, with a bit a swing. It's also much too high for my voice and I didn't want a really high capo on it, so this is the first time I'm tuned to D.

Anyway, here it is.

http://adamharkus.com/acoustic-corner-when-youre-in-love/

Mike67

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« Reply #1 on: March 13, 2017, 04:30:49 PM »
I really liked it, and I'd put money on you being 99% sure it sounds a bit like Curtis Stigers' I wonder why, but only the chorus.  Good song nonetheless, and I liked the lyrics.

Mike

AdamHarkus

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« Reply #2 on: March 13, 2017, 04:33:08 PM »
I really liked it, and I'd put money on you being 99% sure it sounds a bit like Curtis Stigers' I wonder why, but only the chorus.  Good song nonetheless, and I liked the lyrics.

Mike

Never heard of that one. I think the influence is from "Only Love can break your heart"...

Thanks for the comments. Really appreciate it :)

Martinswede

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« Reply #3 on: March 13, 2017, 07:50:21 PM »
Hi!

Yes, 'That on-ly love (can break your heart)'.

I think the intro was a bit too long.
The first verse fine.

The chorus is too repetitive and it says too little.
Maybe just two repeats and a stronger melody or
the same melody and stronger words.
I know this goes against conventions but a chorus needs,
imo, a strong message OR a strong melody. Dreamers can
go for both of them.
It has to be different in some way.

Verse two really tells very little. Just some poetic language.

It ends with a repeat of the by now worn 'When you're in love'.

You say you wrote it in 30 minutes and it wrote it self. Give it
another 30 and maybe you'll be able to turn this into a really good
song. At now it's ok but a bit mediocre.

Cheers,
- Martin