Thank you guys, I appreciate your suggestions. Got some food for thought.
Keith, you are right, of course. I wished, those grammatical slips were just typos. Sheep, yes, sorry for my inattention. I am non-native, so I need to doublecheck for correctness.
Guess, I'll have to drop some 's' -ess. Thank you.
Prechorus: 'Still' turning into 'I' make a lot of sense to me and it feels much more connected when singing.
I got your point about the 2nd and 3rd verse. I'm alright with the 2nd verse, because I like the 'complain about' thing.
The 3rd verse seems the most loose to me as well. I'm going to rewrite it completely. For the moment I think it might be the right moment to throw the spotlight on the inferiors,
especially to prepare the stage for the 4th verse with its 'goal' idea - yes, make sense to me.
Mike, thank you for your ideas. The one verse - one animal thing you mentioned was my very first attempt as well. It started well, but went in the wrong direction after a while. I felt it a bit to folk-ish, something like a farmer related song.
All the same, I would like to make the sheep metaphor work. What if I use an alternate subject in the very first verse, something more ambiguous like 'chicks' (ok, doesn't make sense with 'ruminate')?
Thank you again, need to reflect a bit.