[Paulski]

Hi John
Lots of energy for a song called Sleepy 
Not my fav of yours but you set the bar high don't you?
I think there is a lot of tension in the chorus with the synths and the chromatic vocal lines - it almost sounds like some of the melody is not in-chord. I'm sure it's intentional but to an old f@rt like me seemed a bit OTT 
Now I'm off to get some sleep - unlikely after all this energy
Paul

[Neil C]

John,
Not about dwaves then?
Drums and bass sound great together and you've created an great soundscape with synths and guitars and stuff.
The chorus has a angry madness to it.
Like the ending too.
Thoughts: perhaps so bv's on the chorus as well. And the lead vocal get overpowered by the backing on occasions, mainly the repeated choruses.
Good work, sleep disorders aint much fun.
 
neil

[Steng]

Yo Pompey,

Nice tune. I'm visualising your neck veins about to pop on occasion with some of those vocals. Loads going on to keep the listen interesting. There's some really nice guitar riffs which I want more to the front of the mix, likewise I want the vocal louder and the wooshy synths turned down a tad. Did you just buy a new wooshy synth thing and get all excited? 

Steng

[pompeyjazz]

Thanks everyone for your reviews and critique. As usual some very valid crits which helps me no end.

Wicked - Thanks so much, wanted a sort of dischordant feel to this

Vicki - I'm a harmony monster myself  I think I might have a go at some chorus harmonies

Kev - You could be right, think I might drop the volume a bit

Skub - Glad you got the 'between worlds' hallucinogenic aspect. I was trying to create feeling of sleep deprived delirium

Tim - Agree - I'm going to drop the volume on the synths a tad

Kev - Thank you, I enjoyed the rising chorus

Adam - Any nod to Mr Lennon is more than welcome, yes, "I'm Only Sleeping" I guess

Phil - Thanks, I'm glad I sort of met the brief

Bill - Thankfully I've managed to get my insomnia sorted out now - What a great review

Micky - Thanks  The beeping noise was from a sample from Computer Music mag. Good idea to introduce some more, sort of competing with each other

Laquila - Agree the chorus could do with a minor readjustment

Jamie - I can't stop 

Caz - Thanks for the review - That's a good idea you have with the second "sleepy"

Yoda - I know what you mean, maybe just a little bit more emphasis ?

Paulski - I did want this to sound slightly dischordant but I do get what you're saying and It can sometimes be distracting. Hope you had a good kip 

Neil - Ha ! Dwarves  BV's on the chorus - yes

Steng - Interesting comment about neck veins popping. I used to go really OTT with my vocals, singing live in particular. Now I tend to record vocals at really low levels and sing pretty quietly. I find I can still get the vocal effects by applying these after the initial dry recording.


A Big, Big Thanks to Everyone 

[crystalsuzy]

I agree, for a song called 'Sleepy', it sure has a lot of tense energy, which is great in itself
When listening, I felt like I do when, for some unknown reason, I can't get to sleep 
The swirling synth reminded me of how I feel when I'm just drifting off, but then this wave of nervous energy races through me, and on and on this pattern cycles throughout the night
Lots of interesting stuff going on in this John I liked it a lot 

[Mike67]

I'm a big fan of 80's music and this took me right back to my youth.  Great song, great production value, and I loved the synths. It amazes me every time I hear that stuff that you guys are creating. It's simply a joy.

Mike 

[Morefrog Jones]

Some nice changes of pace and great backing track.
Nice commercial sound but cool at the same time.
Another quality song that seem to produce on a regular basis - its no wonder you cant sleep

[digger72]

Hi John,

Really great synth sounds - love the way the roll like waves during the middle section.
It does conjure that haze between sleep and wakefulness.

It's a full track, but everything is distinguishable.
Solid vocal performance.

Heck knows how you write so many quality and different style of songs so quickly.

Digger

[montydog]

Hi,

I'm not a fan of 80's music so I approached this with some trepidation. A bit of a curate's egg this one for me. Good in parts, particularly the synth lines, drums and bass. The vocal sounded too thin and strained in places - maybe some double tracking and reverb to fatten the vocal up. The synths sometimes tended to overwhelm the vocal but overall, a pretty solid song.

M

[pompeyjazz]

Thanks for the further replies and critique 

crystalsuzy - Thanks, I was trying to capture the sort of tense energy that keeps you awake at night, especially when you really want to sleep 

Mike67 - Great comments, glad you enjoyed the listen

Morefrog - Thanks, yes I seem to have tunes banging around my head all the time, usually at times when I can't get to record the idea which is pretty frustrating !

Digger - Glad I managed to get that middle bit to portray exactly what you were thinking

Monydog - Interesting sweeping generalisation regarding 80's music. There was some good stuff in the 80's you know  Although I don't particularly think that this is 80's. Thanks for the comments regarding vocal "fattening" I'll have to have a play with that. 


Cheers all

Pompeyjazz

[rightly]

yes thatrising melody
epic
I've been thinking about writing a song insomnia nothing this ambitious though.
great character.
well done!