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« on: January 30, 2017, 05:01:25 PM »
Hi this is a Old Song That IS Still W.I.P.

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                         (----When words collide---)

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Intro X2.
(V1).
People Laugh, People Cry...
People Live, People Die...
Some Are Young, Some Are Old...
That Is Life, So Am Told...

(P/ch).
When Words, Don't Make, Any Sense...
When Words, Don't Make, Any Sense...
In Life's... Defence!!...

(Ch).X2.
Hold Me Close...
Hold Me Tight...
When Words Collide...
With Me, Tonight...

(V2).
From People Here, To People There...
Wars Claim Life,  Everywhere...
Most Are Young, Some Are Old...
Heh!!... That Is Life, So Am Told...

(P/ch).
When Words, Don't Make, Any Sense...
When Words, Don't Make, Any Sense...
In Man's... Defence!!...

(Ch).X2.
Hold Me Close...
Hold Me Tight...
When Words Collide...
With Me, Tonight...

(V3).
Cruelty Here, Cruelty There...                      
Animals Die, EveryWhere...
Some for Food, Most For Fun...
You Tell me, What They Have Done...

(P/ch).
When Words, Don't Make, Any Sense...
When Words, Don't Make, Any Sense...
In Man's... Defence!!...

(Ch).X2.
Hold Me Close...
Hold Me Tight...
When Words Collide...
With Me Tonight...

People Crying, Dying Here...
People Suffering, Here & there...
World Pollution, EveryWhere...
Animals Dying, This Ain't fair...
That's The World,  We Live In...
If That Is Life, Please, Tell Me...
Where Is Sin...
Where Is Sin...
Tell Me...
Where Is Sin...
Where Is Sin...

When Words, Don't Make, Any Sense...
When Words, Don't Make, Any Sense...
In Life's... Defence!!...

The End...
« Last Edit: January 31, 2017, 08:00:10 PM by 11 »
Melody 1st...
Lyrics Will Come After ;)

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« Reply #1 on: January 30, 2017, 11:32:15 PM »
I'm on an iPad and found listening on Facebook and reading lyrics at the same time  impossible.

I like the mood. I'm a yo la tengo and Lou reed fan ...to my ears this is in the ballpark.

Not sure I jive with thre chorus words. Having trouble resolving what it means to me.

I really like the quiet piano that appears around 2:30


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« Reply #2 on: January 31, 2017, 06:06:15 AM »
Hi mikek

This is an early version of this...
The version i have on itunes & deezer n all the other places..., is far better
I will try & get that version on facebook.
But still work in progress, am not happy with some things, with that version...
Maybe its just me..?. When people say what version do you like?...
I always reply, the one in my head... its getting that version out... lol.

The song is about when growing up & we see
People happy, then sad..., & people living & dying...,
We are told thats life, when people are sad...
Or die...

But to be sad or die, summit must have took place...?,
So in lifes defence, those words don't make sense...
The chorus is when, we are touched by a death
Of a love one..., or something else...?, & people, try their best to comfort you...
Words collide with us, they bounce off us, & don't sink in... :(
At these... times, even years later, they still don't make sense... :/

From verse 2 onwords... its touching when mankind...
causes hurt, to us via war... etc...
Words don't make any sense, in wars defence...
Just crazy this world?, how life is so cheap...
So so sad...
I also touch on how, mankind also mistreats animals,
U see suffering... Everywhere..., the same applies here, words don't make sense in mans defence...
Etc... :(

I round it all off, with the state of the planet... :(
Our home... what we have done to this place.., pollution,
Wars, suffering, death, the list goes on... :/

But the point i drive home at the end, if all this is Life you say...
Where is Sin?...

We all have Sin...
Causing all of this...

Death, bad choices, that result in pain, suffering, & death... :(


Thats the point am trying to drive home, with this song...

I hope this helps ;)


« Last Edit: January 31, 2017, 05:07:54 PM by 11 »
Melody 1st...
Lyrics Will Come After ;)

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« Reply #3 on: January 31, 2017, 01:30:52 PM »
edit.. i'm sorry... it is the "pre chorus" that i struggle with.  i am having trouble turning that phrase around in my mind.  perhaps it is a cultural thing.
« Last Edit: January 31, 2017, 03:13:18 PM by mikek »

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« Reply #4 on: January 31, 2017, 05:06:01 PM »
Hi there the pre chorus
Is

An example...

If someone we love dies unexpected...
& we are torn apart at the news...

Family & friends will be trying to comfort yah...
Saying stuff...
Even going as far as God needs another angel in heaven... etc
What ever words...
They say to comfort u... at these times dont make sense...

Hence
Pre/ch
When words dont make any sense

In lifes or mans defence...

I dont think its a cultural thing...
Cause people all over the earth ask WHY!!!!

When bad things Happen....

But the answers fall short...

Why do good people die but theres bad people everywhere?....
He was a good man... good to everyone... etc....
But hes gone.... :(

Am trying to touch on the questions of life that go unanswered...
Why do people die, suffer, why wars, etc...
If everyone wants peace why the heck is it so hard to attain?.

The pre/chorus is touching on when answers dont make any sense...

This kinda lol :)
Melody 1st...
Lyrics Will Come After ;)

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« Reply #5 on: February 01, 2017, 04:30:31 PM »
i sent you a pm

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« Reply #6 on: February 02, 2017, 02:32:54 AM »
Got a really nice feel. Cant help but think that some light/stripped back drums brought in half way through could be good though. Nothing too heavy.
Nice job :)
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« Reply #7 on: February 04, 2017, 12:51:19 AM »
Hi Caz, yup light Drums or summit else, in there 🙃
Would'nt go a miss 😜
Melody 1st...
Lyrics Will Come After ;)