[11]

Hi all
 Iam new here, i have lots of Songs...
This one is Called (SneakyThing) its a Ballad
& the link is to the 1st live version we did using an iphone...
I posted it on facebook & youtube...
Since that recording i have changed the last two lines to what it is now
So this version of the song, is the old ending...

Link

Lyrics Below...


                           {Sneaky Thing!}

Verse1.
I Have, Never Felt...
Got A Heart, Of Stone...
I Have, Never Felt...
But Now, Am Torn...
Love Is A, Sneaky Thing...
Where Did You, Come From?...
Yes, Love Is A, Sneaky Thing...
Please Darling, Come Home, Come Home...

Chorus.
You Are My, EveryThing...
You Are My, Life...
You Are My, EveryThing...
Please Come, Home Tonight...
You Are My, EveryThing...
Please Darling, Come Home...

Verse2.
Left Here, Thinking...
When Am, All Alone...
I Sure Miss, You Baby...
Oh Darling, Please Phone...
Love Is A, Sneaky Thing...
Where Did I, Go Wrong?...
Yes, Love Is A, Sneaky Thing...
Please Darling, Darling... Come Home...

Chorus.
You Are My, EveryThing...
You Are My, Life...
You Are My, EveryThing...
Please Come, Home Tonight...
You Are My, EveryThing...
Please Darling, Come Home...

Int...
I Never Seen, That Smile...
I Never Bought, Out Time...
I Never Took, That Hand...
When You, Where Mine...

Verse3.
Oh I, Am Broken...
Yes, Ripped Apart...
Never Thought, I Had...
Had, A Heart...
Love Is A, Sneaky Thing...
I Know I, Did Wrong?...
Yes, Love Is A, Sneaky Thing...
Oh Baby, Baby... Come Home...

Chorus.
You Are My, EveryThing...
You Are My, Life...
You Are My, EveryThing...
Please Come, Home Tonight...
You Are My, EveryThing...
Please Darling, Come Home...

Ending Solo...
Only If I Took The Time...
Only If I Slowed Right Down...
Then I Would Clearly See...
That Love Didn't Sneak...
Sneak Up On Me...

The End.

[Boydie]

I have had a bit of a clean up of your posts as you had posted 7 songs in the "work in progress" board and 7 songs in the lyrics board

This is against the posting guidelines and verging on "spamming" the forum

I know that you have now read the guidelines so hopefully you will now get some constructive feedback

I completely understand you are keen to post your material but I would suggest being patient and only post a set of lyrics every week, spending the time in between reviewing others, which will in turn ensure you get plenty of reviews

[11]

Thx i didnt know how to delete them thx pal

[tomcrocus]

Hi Matt,
           i read the lyrics and i've got to admit i was struggling
for the tune,then i had a listen and i got it,the female singer has
a real nice voice.
The only thing that bugs me a bit and i know it's an integral part
of the song is the word SNEAKY,maybe that's just me and others will
think it's cool,
                   great job and good luck with your future endeavours, Tom.

[11]

Hi Tom

Thx for taking the time out... to listen to it...

What SneakyThing Lyric is about

Some time we dont know how much we love People until
They are Gone... u feel the pain, the loss, etc...
& thats when Love Sneaks up on yah & bites yah bum...

Thats why Love is a Sneakything...
At the end of the Song is the Clincher..

Only If I Bought Out Time...
Only If I Slowed Right Down...
Then I Would Clearly See...
That Love Did'nt Sneak!!
Sneak Up On Me!!!....

We can be too busy with life we dont notice whats more important...

Means She was in love all along but did'nt
Know it :/

Maybe help lol

[ScottLevi]

Hey 11,

I'll be honest when I logged into the forum the other day and spotted "11" littering the recent posts I assumed you were trying to sell kitchens like the spam-bots which sometimes appear on here.

I'm glad Boydie's got more sense and dedication than myself as I wouldn't have shown the patience; as it looks like a good move as it seems you're a passionate and talented songwriter who's willing a add value.

There's no software-enforced rules on the forum which helps create more of a community rather than a process, so being polite and aware is the way forward from my experience.

Enough of my babbling sorry, really refreshing lyrics and music here. I agree with tom on reading it's difficult to understand how it will come together and I wasn't convinced from reading, but the implementation makes all clear and it works well.

Enjoy the speaking parts dotted throughout also, integrated seamlessly and adds something unique/experimental which is always welcome from my point of view.

All the best,
Scott.

[11]

Hi scott, the reading parts is her reflecting on things...
Yup i know, its new to some, but its how i had it... in my head...
What i get is the song... evolves when getting written...
I said to her put her stamp on it, cause no one has sang it yet, but she must read those parts...
The recording thats on here, is her 1st crack at it..
She done really well, as Songwriters we create songs
Some say thats my baby... the song...

Well i created SneakyThing she breathes life into it
Good effort!!!

Thx scott for taken the time to hear my song...
As for the other day i didnt read the rules..
I should have... but it wont happen again i hope i can impart some
Help in some ways to songwriters

[finestrat]

Hi Matt

Refreshingly simple, maybe a tad on the long side and I think I would have laid down another guitar track to round it out a bit and to compliment the voice (which is very nice btw)

[11]

Hi finestrat

Thx for taking the time to hear it
Yup it needs more dressing up...
It is a tad long.. lol but heh its what it is...
I want to get piano in there, with violin...
Etc...

But am working on that... the now...
Also i will be getting done in a local studio, not far from me..
So it should be a'lot better than the 1st recording using iphone...

Its just basic melody & volcal...
She has a nice voice

[Arkwright]

Hey 11

As this is posted in the lyrics section, I haven't had a listen to the track on you tube as it may distract me from concentrating solely on the lyrics.

Structure and flow seem to work well and it's an easy read. The rhyming is consistent and there's a nice use of near rhymes which I always appreciate.

If I have any criticism, it's with the lack of story arc. To me the verses all say the same thing and don't take me anywhere new.

That being said, I think it's a great effort tackling a well worn theme.

Good work...

[11]

Hi ark

Yup many of these types of songs out there...
I should have posted in work in progress

What i was trying to achieve with the verses is the stages one feels in that situation...
Then reflecting on the speaking parts & chorus is expressing how much she wanted him back...

Lol well its not bad for under an hours work

[Vintage54]

  Hi,
   Haven't listened to the music, just concentrating on the words. Have to be honest, although this is not bad, i find some of the language a little too familiar and cliched. The chorus more so than the rest of the song. The final verse is more interesting than what went before, but doesn't really rescue the rest. As i said, it's not bad, don't wish to be over critical. I'm sure there is better to come from you. Thanks for posting.

                                  Vintage54

[11]

Well its one of many that i have...

Well some like & some dont lol
But am glad if the feedback