I'm considering this song for an EP together with "
The Mark of the Chains", "
The Ballad of the Maid of Innail" and probably one more, not yet selected/written.
Forever TogetherI'm posting in Finished Songs because I am done with it, unless I am moved to make changes by any feedback. I know it's a terrible recording. That will be done over at some point, but that's for later. The song itself is written and that's what I'm looking for opinions on.
I'm looking for feedback on the words: There's no rhyming, does it work? The prosody is all wrong in some places, can I get away with it?) And how about the feel of the arrangement in general--the melody, the keyboard/flute sound, and how they all fit together. Also the background vocals--they don't sound good at the moment, but is that type of idea workable--if it was polished?
I'm trying to make it sort of Celtish sounding...did I succeed?
On this one I also decided to experiment a little with production in a very elementary sense. I added some reverb, EQ and compression. In that order. I probably should have done reverb last, right? Except for the reverb I used presets, and I didn't change any adjustments. Frankly, I can't hear the difference, except for a little of the reverb--the best reason in the world for me to have someone else take care of production! But if you can tell what I did and if you have any suggestions for improvement in that regard, I'd love to hear them. It wouldn't hurt me to learn a little bit about it.
Okay, now you know the questions I need answered, here's the lyric:
FOREVER TOGETHER
Give to me a rose before you walk away from me
Don't just vanish in the night as if you'd never existed
I will always love you and I'll ever be
True to you no matter how long I...
Have to wait for you to understand that you and I
Always will be truly bonded deep in our souls
I'll be waiting here for you when you come back to
Me and I will always love you
So I say to you good-bye and sweet travels
I'll be thinking ev'ry day about you
Yes, I say to you good-bye and come back to
Be with me forever together
INSTRUMENTAL
I'll be waiting here for you when you come back to
Me and I will always love you
So I say to you good-bye and sweet travels
I'll be thinking ev'ry day about you
Yes, I say to you good-bye and come back to
Be with me forever together
© 2017 Vicki MorrisonPS: I'm no particular fan of silly love songs, and I have no idea how this one got in my head, but I had to get rid of it, so there you go.