Song I literally just wrote right now. Would really love some generic feedback. My main worries are the lyrics being too weird/cheesy and the melody being too familiar... I've only done 2 verses and a chorus so far but it'd be nice to get some feedback as I go?
(also poor quality vid sorry - i let my mic to a girl on my course and my phone's saying I have no memory so I had to use the webcam on my laptop)
Link:
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Lyrics:
It's a sunny day/ things will go my way/ and even if they don't/ I'll keep marching on/ I'm going to get up and go for a run/ and my 12 pm I'll have my work done and even if I don't/ I'll keep marching on
Cos there's no point in holding a grudge or trying to get up and go for a run/ when you mind is in a different place/ and you feel as though you're in outer space/ so take care of your heart your hands and mind/ give them each some quality time/ cos i know we can make it through/ and there will be hope for me and you
You might have some bills to pay/ or a 10000 word essay due in 2 days/ but if it all falls down/ just keep marching on/ I'm not saying just forget and be lazy/ I'm just saying life can be crazy/ and if it all falls down/ just keep marching on/
Cos there's no point in holding a grudge or trying to get up and go for a run/ when you mind is in a different place/ and you feel as though you're in outer space/ so take care of your heart your hands and mind/ give them each some quality time/ cos i know we can make it through/ and there will be hope for me and you