Hi,
Just wondering if anyone wld like to help me finish this song....
The lyrics below....the chorus is a bit sappy, a bit obvious...
I have some music done...but I would like fresh input/ideas....
Thanks, if you can
Genre: soft rock/A/C or ballad
Male singer
FIRST CRY OF GOODBYE
I'm here
On that same stretch of beach
Where we jogged and we talked
In that early morning fog
I don't care
When people start to stare
Seems I’m talkin’ with myself
But I talk with you, no one else
Gonna find your wet footprints
Gonna step right in
The waves can rush in
But I won't let them
Erase any trace of you
… I don't wanna cry
I don't wanna cry
the FIRST CRY OF GOODBYE
I just want you here in front of my eyes (too obvious line here?)
Every day I wanna r call your name out
Cause deep down I feel you’re still alive
Feel you’re alive (repeat only once?)
Feel you’re alive
the FIRST CRY OF GOODBYE
I just want you here in front of my eyes
I don't wanna cry
the FIRST CRY OF GOODBYE
I just want you here in front of my eyes
I’ll grab (the times they shared, might be better?)
Washed up bits of a wreck's mast
Scrape our names on the sand
Sayin here’s the place, where we ran
And I’ll find your wet footprints
Gonna step right in
The waves can rush in
But I won't let them
Erase any trace of you
… I don't wanna cry (pause before chorus)
I don't wanna cry
the FIRST CRY OF GOODBYE
I just want you here in front of my eyes
Each day wanna call your name aloud
Cause deep down I feel you’re still alive
Feel you’re alive
Feel you’re alive
I don't wanna cry
the FIRST CRY OF GOODBYE
I just want you here in front of my eyes
I don't wanna cry
the FIRST CRY OF GOODBYE
I just want you here in front of my eyes
You were someone that everyone loved
You are someone that everyone still loves
Gonna find your wet footprints
Gonna step right in
Chorus rpt