[Paulski]

Hi all - a bit of an experimental POV.
Can you tell what this is about - think outside the fridge  

Life in the Fridge

 {vs}
 Check out Cabbage
 He ain't lookin' so hot
 Been here a month now
 Startin' to rot
 Take a look inside 'im
 You'll see what he got
 But good ol' Cabbage
 Ain't lookin' too hot

 {ch}
 Me, I'll never make it onto a plate
 After they read my expiry date

 Pretty Tomato
 Seen better days
 'bout a week ago
 She started to waste
 It'll break my heart
 Seein' her replaced
 But my sweet Tomato
 Seen better days

 I ain't too blind to know my fate
 After they've seen my expiry date

 {br}
 Look at that Milk!!
 All fresh in the face!
 Weren't that long ago
 I was in his place
 Awkwardly ogling
 The spots, the mould
 "But stick around, kid"
 "Soon you'll get old!"

 Soon you'll get old..

 Guess it's goodbye now - bein' carried away
 'cause someone just noticed..
 my expiry date

[Neil C]

Paul,
Clever can operate a multiple levels, really good work.
Just wonder whether you should call it expiry date?
 
Neil

[sparrow]

I like the opening lines of the chorus very tight.Gd song no doubt

[Jazzone]

 Call it 'Expiry date'.   

[ScottLevi]

Ay Paul I'm really admiring your creativity lately.

Think it's great that you've taken an almost novelty concept (Rotting Food) but put it across in such a powerful way with a strong message.

Digging the rhythm too, always appreciate a simple but effective flow to bop along to whilst reading. Looking forwarding to seeing what you do with 'em.

All the best,
Scott.

[PaulAds]

its good and smart and flows well...but where will the music take it...?

and yeah - "expiry date" is a good call, i reckon

nice 

[Vintage54]

   Hi Paulski,

        I'm getting, decay, death, someone unloved and left on the shelf. Of course i could be wide of the mark, but no matter, it's pretty neat anyway. Tomato verse is my fav.

                           Clever
                             Vintage54

[adamfarr]

Hey Paulski - fine, original work here. I love the way this is effectively a jokey sounding song but packs a bitter punch when we realise this is a metaphor. Clever progression as well as each verse has a slightly different theme (lost looks, to be replaced, already replaced). I think a very straight sincere delivery would go well with this one. Or not... Very cool anyway.