Hi Neil
Lovely laid back vibe, clever use of space in the chorus between 'will be's, I like the way the second will be is sung on the upstroke. For me, little details like that gives it a real lift from just a nice tune to the next level. I agree with your own comments that there are some minor rough edges on the vocals. If it were me, I'd be tempted to redo a line or two to address slight pitching issues, but that's me...don't know when to leave things well alone to allow the original feel to shine!
Great job, really enjoyed this.
Bill