I don't have much to add to what's already been said. You have quite a distinctive style of melody writing and of singing that I like very much. Sometimes there are bits in the melody that I might do a little differently but then it might not be "you" anymore.
My favorite verse in this one is:
I am your Ganymede, you are the only world for me,
I'll stay until you see my starlight in your eyes,
I walk along this street alone, don't know which way to go,
Give me a sign so I can follow you,
It feels the most creative and original to me and it catches my ear.
Vicki