[Sullish]

Recorded this on an iPhone app so not great quality, just a demo of an idea I have....

https://soundcloud.com/sullivancomish/scars90-1


15 years, does it mean exactly nothing to her now
Sweat and tears, you gave all that your body would allow
She has no shame in what she's doing to your soul
Who's to blame for the situation it's out of control

The boy and girl, they don't see the pain you feel inside

Some scars heal and some will fade away
Some will remain to remind you of your yesterdays

Don’t be too forensic, you’ll only dig up things you’d rather forget
she’s acting so demented, nothing like the woman that you first met
take your time, and fate will turn your life around
its a crime, she’s crushed your soul and left it on the ground

The boy and girl, they don't see the pain you feel inside

Some scars heal and some will fade away
Some will remain to remind you of your yesterdays

[ShinyThang]

Great start. Some really good lines in there. I think you need to do more musically to differentiate the chorus from the verses.

Lyric could do with a little attention to make sure it's saying what you mean to say particularly in the second verse it seemed, to me at least, to be a little random but it did hit a nerve with me so, must be almost there.

I like the 'don't be too forensic...' line but couldn't help thinking it should end more like '...She has all the evidence bagged & tagged' but only because that's the way I felt. You've chosen a very personal subject but also one which others will relate to and will render with their own experience. Hmmm. Best of luck with it.

[kevysc]

Nice tune and has a lot of potential.

I would agree with the comment about changing up the chorus: would suggest that adding backing vocals (plus possibly some Hi Gain guitar power chords) would "lift" it for greater impact