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Things In Life

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chloeannza

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« on: August 24, 2016, 06:13:13 PM »
I’m barely holding on to myself because there is nobody else that can fix me tonight.
Things don’t go away like the speed of light.
I know I’m not right but I’m seeking for my trust in myself.
I need to climb these shelves I call my doubts.
I’m the only one that can help.

We all wish we could fly.
Wouldn’t that make these miserable times go by?
Focus on your life because you can’t live someone else’s.

Why, do we have to take things so slow in life?
Please someone tell me to put down that knife.
Why are you so terrified?
It’s all gonna be okay sometime.
So I just have to fight for what is righteously mine!

I get it.
I get why you want to drown in our sorrow.
Smoking that blunt and taking those drugs
won’t help you punk.
You say “that’s hard.”
Really? I thought we just wanted to die
for no reason. B**ch please.
I know you’re struggling but guess what so am I!

We all wish we could fly.
But that’s not our focus for our lives.
We can’t waste time on what could have been.
We are going to make history so let’s get out of our doom.


Why, do we have to take things so slow in life?
Please someone tell me to put down that knife.
Why are you so terrified?
It’s all gonna be okay sometime.
So I just have to fight for what is righteously mine!
So I just have to fight for what is righteously mine!!!!


« Last Edit: August 25, 2016, 04:06:36 PM by chloeannza »

Paulski

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« Reply #1 on: August 25, 2016, 09:13:39 PM »
Hi Chloe  ;D

It looks good to me - you have some great lines in there :)
To be a song lyric though you might want to make the number of lines in each verse the same - or you'll really be challenging the musician and he/she might give it a pass. There are some spots where it is unclear who "you" and "we" are.  Oh, and I think your title should be "Righteously Mine" because that's the hook you use at the end of your repeating chorus.

cheers
Paul