[AdamHarkus]

Hi Everyone,

I'd love some feedback on this one of mine...

https://adamharkusblog.wordpress.com/2016/05/27/this-is-who-i-am/

Regards

Adam

[pompeyjazz]

Hi Adam,

Welcome, But firstly I would have a look at the forum rules. You are allowed to post one song every two weeks and should include the lyrics with the song. I'm sure if you start reviewing some other members submissions you'll get some more than useful feedback.

Cheers 

John

[AdamHarkus]

Sorry, I'll delete this...

[AdamHarkus]

It appears I can't

Thanks for the advice, I'll start giving feedback on other's songs too.

[Flux Identity]

Hi Adam,

I really like your song. Enjoyed every second of it

Awesome production! Everything sits very well in the mix.

Harmonies are simply beautiful.

Great job my friend

[AdamHarkus]

Hi Adam,

I really like your song. Enjoyed every second of it

Awesome production! Everything sits very well in the mix.

Harmonies are simply beautiful.

Great job my friend

Hi Flux.

Thank you very much.  Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the feedback !

[Draven]

Excellent chord progression. I greatly enjoyed your verses.
I found your chorus a bit underwhelming though.

I love your vocals though. Great tone for the mood you're setting with your song.

Edit: The ironic thing is, despite me finding your chorus underwhelming, it's stuck in my head lol

[lillypilly]

Hi I agree with what Pompeyjazz had to say all the way

Also be good to see the lyrics it makes for better and easier commenting

hope you take the time to review other peoples songs on here so it a share kind of site not just one way.
As it is a very good site as well

cheers

[pompeyjazz]

Like this a lot but maybe lead voc is too upfront In the mix. Bvs are great but more integration Maybe panning and reverb. Loved it anyway. Just a few tweaks and you're on to a winner

[IronKnee]

Hi Adam......nice song.....very polished.
To me, a Hawaiian Hermit with one ear to the ground, it sounds like a billion other songs. However, with some more samples of your stuff, my opinion may change.
There are a tillion of us out there playing our hearts content...............try to be different.......real different 

FYI.......that's what I tell myself, on a daily basis 
                                                                                                -Tom

[AdamHarkus]

Excellent chord progression. I greatly enjoyed your verses.
I found your chorus a bit underwhelming though.

I love your vocals though. Great tone for the mood you're setting with your song.

Edit: The ironic thing is, despite me finding your chorus underwhelming, it's stuck in my head lol

Thanks Draven. You wouldn't believe what a struggle that chorus was. To be honest I was just happy to get it finished.

[AdamHarkus]

Hi I agree with what Pompeyjazz had to say all the way

Also be good to see the lyrics it makes for better and easier commenting

hope you take the time to review other peoples songs on here so it a share kind of site not just one way.
As it is a very good site as well

cheers

Hi , I do need to get more involved so I'll check out some tracks later today.

Lyrics.....

Every day I wame up
It's all the same to me
Take my medication
Cos now it's part of me
Each day I get older
I'm losing all the things I used to have and relied on every day just to survive
To stay alive

This is who I am
I wouldn't change a single thing
I'm doing all I can
No matter what you think of me
And this is where I stand
You'll never find me moving again

This life has no meaning
I just get by
I can't seem to find the way we used to feel all the time
A younger man inside
I never thought I'd see the day
When I turned to say
"If I was twenty years younger, I'd show you the way"
But that was yesterday