Thanks again everyone for the feedback, this is a bit of departure from my usual sort of song posted here so it has been fascinating to follow your responses.
I also love the synthy bit at the end of the choral break (although I don´t think you need to state it´s a choral break in the lyrics unless they are subtitles for the hard of hearing 
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I put that is deliberately, the idea being that the choirs and trumpets are very religious sounds but cos they are synth sounds as well they sound kind of fake. I phased it towards the end to add to that artificial effect.
However, production-wise I just want to hear this one toned-down, slowed-down and with a lot less. You have excellent production skills but for some reason there is way too much instrumentation on this for me, unlike "Emily", where it worked excellently. This one didn´t do it though and I agree with Jambrains about the drums, they didn´t sound right. Put it out with just piano and enter it into the Barebones comp. You may not win it but you´ll intimidate everyone else. Hope you take the production points constructively - it is a fantastic song.
I will have to look at the drums and make sure something doesn't need dealing with.
If I had to submit every song unproduced I would lose my mind, I love producing a track and I feel that arrangement and production is an important part of the process we should all embrace.
I was playing around a bit of this one and may have gone overboard a touch, trying to follow the lyrically meaning in the arrangement.
I appreciated the feedback and it does really help to know when experiments work, having wide appeal and when they divide listeners.
