howdy all some of you may not be into country, and thats all right yall might still have great ideas. i have been trying to write alone for a while now and songs just sound down right bad. So here go what i have so far.
Driving down the road today
I pulled off to the side
Tears running down my face
As the rain hounds on
If i could count a thousand reasons i could stay
could you count a thousand more why i should stay
young and scared i had no idea what to do from here
so i cried and strummed to the beat of the rain
ya not very good but i try and make my songs around a memory.
Thanks for looking and helping
Loved the opening set of lines.
Not sure what "hounds on" is saying, but there are alternatives, since it doesn't rhyme anywhere it's easily replaced or explained. Even not fully understanding that, I still liked the lines.
"If i could count a thousand reasons i could stay
could you count a thousand more why i should stay."
I would suggest you don't rhyme "stay" with "stay." It jars the listener. Here's a suggested alternative direction.
"If i could count a thousand reasons i could stay
If I thought it wouldn't bring you any pain." (Note that I'm rhyming with "rain" in the fourth line, not "stay" in the first. This isn't a good line I've provided, just a suggested different method of dealing with this.)
And here is a suggestion for the final line.
Young and scared i had no idea what I should do from here
so i cried and strummed my old guitar to the beat of the falling rain.
Of course, you probably have your own tune and "flow" in mind, so all this might not apply.
Now, a short lecture.
NEVER, NEVER, NEVER, NEVER say (or allow yourself to think) "ya not very good."
We're all AFRAID our stuff isn't good. And for each of us, sometimes it really isn't.
But NEVER short change yourself by thinking what you're working on "isn't any good." Make US tell you it isn't good enough. That's what we DO for one another. No one is less qualified than you are to dismiss your own work.
It's YOUR job to believe it's GREAT. And it's our job to tell you when it isn't. And, in turn, it's your job to honestly tell us when our stuff isn't great.
If we DO tell you it's not great, (and unless a lot of us tell you so, "it ain't necessarily so.") you can either improve it, abandon it, or stand by it.
Keep in mind that any one criticism is of no value. It's the consensus and the "patterns of criticism" that tells us/you whether your/our songs are good.
But the point is.... believe in what you are doing until there is feedback from someone else that tells you not to. THEN... sometimes you STILL have to believe in your own vision and ignore all the critics.
Every great story and/or song was hated by someone, but still overcame that and became what it was destined to be. Critics aren't always right.
Anyway, this was intended as an encouraging lecture, not a "trip to the woodshed."
I'm looking forward to hearing what this lyric might become.