[L. Sampson]

hello everybody...

from the "lyrics" part of the forum (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/lyric-reviews/wanna-be-(provisary-title)/), i jump here with a first shot of this song i finally called "a wanna be pray"

here are the lyrics :

I wanna be...
a tree, you see...
and got time to know the name
of every flower and bee, you see...
I wanna be the canopy...

I wanna be...
I wanna be...

I wanna be...
a dolphin, you know...
wanna ride ride through a liquid reality....
away from gravity....
a wanna be an afterglow....

I wanna be...
I wanna be...

I wanna be, and I swear...
just a cloud in the air....
the sun in your bliss...
a moment you miss...

I wanna be...
I wanna be...

I wanna be, and I've been told :
a little part of it all...
everyday freefall...
i wanna be God !!!! "

and here is the link :

https://soundcloud.com/sampson-ludovic/a-wanna-be-pray-brand-new-316


so let me know if it matches....


have a good day,

L. S

[CaliaMoko]

If you want feedback, you need to give feedback. You've posted 38 times (at the time I'm writing this). Not even one post was feedback for anyone else.

You probably just haven't thought about it, but I recommend a read of the guidelines:
http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/feedback-on-works-in-progress/rules-and-guidelines-for-posting-in-the-review-forums-read-before-posting/

[Paulski]

I'm offering the same feedback as Vicki:

Giveth and ye shall receiveth