First post on the forum! I have just started attempting to write songs, and I plan to start doing some open mics this year (once I've built up the confidence!).
This is recorded on garage band via my laptop mic, so the quality is poor, but I think you can get a good sense of it . I plan to buy a proper mic to improve the quality. This is just me playing and singing on a single track.
I'm looking for genuine feedback on my singing, the melody - and on the lyrics. I have a tendency to be very sentimental in my lyrics and lapse into cliche...hoping getting some feedback will push me to be a little more original.
Please be honest - I really want to improve so I can play out more confidently, and this sort of forum seems a great place for frank feedback.
This one came to me very quickly, which slightly makes me worry I have unconsciously ripped off the melody
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Anyway, thanks in advance for listening - looking forward to hearing and commenting on some of your songs.
https://soundcloud.com/tomconwa/raise-you-up-14-02-2016-1526LYRICS:
Wrote it in the steam
On the mirror
Said it on the bus
When you were sleeping
Threw it to the wind
When we were walking
Said it in a prayer
In the stalls
*I will raise you up
Till you can’t get any higher
I will raise you up like a goddess
Don’t ask me how
I will raise you up
Till you can’t get any higher
I will raise you up like a goddess
Don’t ask me how
My dear*
Heard it in the drums
of that song
Saw it the things
I got wrong
Felt it in the scratches
On the table
Found it on pebble
on the beach
*I will raise you up
Till you can’t get any higher
I will raise you up like a goddess
Don’t ask me how
But when it all goes down
I’ll be there
For you
My dear *
