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18 in the 80s

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« on: February 08, 2016, 08:13:25 PM »
Acoustic demo.   All thoughts appreciated!

https://soundcloud.com/5xgeetptq9kl/demo-no-worries

Cheers

Paul

Lyrics

Verse One

I had a woman, a best friend and money
I thought I had it all         
Then one day them three got it together     
And my key wouldn't fit my door   

Chorus
(My) best friend,  my woman and my money   
Used to worry me before       
All the things that used to worry me       
Don't worry me no more       
 
I had a woman, a best friend and my money   
Now I ain't none no more
All the things that used to worry me       
Don't worry me like before     


Verse two
My best friend got his feet nicely under     
A table that I bought     
So now I quit my job cos I aint gotta       
buy that stuff no more   

Now I ain't got no lying best friends           
Trying a take what I ain't got           
Cos I ain't got no money     
Or no woman to break my heart     


Chorus
(My) best friend,  my woman and my money   
Used to worry me before       
All the things that used to worry me       
Don't worry me no more       
 
I had a woman, a best friend and my money   
Now I ain't none no more
All the things that used to worry me       
Don't worry me like before     


Verse 3
People ask me how I'm doing
I say "I'm doing fine"
No woman best friend money
Is a weight off of my mind

I know they don't believe me
But I'm as happy as a calm
Now I don't know how happy clams is
But I know I am, cos. ...


Chorus
(My) best friend,  my woman and my money   
Used to worry me before       
All the things that used to worry me       
Don't worry me no more       
 
I had a woman, a best friend and my money   
Now I ain't none no more
All the things that used to worry me       
Don't worry me like before     
« Last Edit: March 09, 2016, 10:17:44 PM by 18 in the 80s »
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« Reply #1 on: March 09, 2016, 09:56:37 PM »
hey Paul,

great guitar on this one!

I'd love to hear a good bit more volume on the vocal though...let those lyrics shine through! :)

Promising effort though

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« Reply #2 on: March 09, 2016, 10:13:34 PM »
I need lyrics...please...you can edit your original post and add them in.

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« Reply #3 on: March 09, 2016, 10:19:38 PM »
Hi and thanks to everyone for looking at my son

Is added lyrics to the initial post.

Thanks again

Paul

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« Reply #4 on: March 10, 2016, 01:57:07 AM »
1. I like the peppy and catchy tune and rhythm. Makes me tap my foot and want to sing along. I got a kick out of the lines: "My best friend got his feet nicely under / A table that I bought."

2. I like the message of being detached from events over which you have no control. Although, I suspect the singer might be trying to convince himself?

3. I had trouble following the lyrics, even while they were right in front of me. For one thing, you sang them differently than they are printed--sometimes different words, sometimes in a different order. For another, it sounded like you put a microphone in front of your guitar and played away while you were singing somewhere above it. In other words the guitar sounds like it's close to the microphone and your voice sounds like your face is far away.

I might have had more comments on the lyrics--or maybe not--but I'm not sure because I don't think what's printed quite matches what you sang.

Overall, I find it a good crowd-pleasing foot-stomper.

Vicki