[Paulski]

Another song about a song
Comments/suggs are welcomed..
Paul

I Can't Write That Song
Copyright © 2016 Tennyson Road Music

They say to "pour your heart out", "bare your soul"
"Never sing about the things that you don't know"
So I reached inside to try to find my pain
And sat down at the piano (to try again)

Thought of how dear Dad was taken from my world
Figured I could spin those memories into gold
But before I played a note or sang a phrase
There it was - my worried heart - standing in my way..

{1/2 ch}
I can't write that song
Those wounds are far too raw
I wish I could be that strong
But I can't write that song

Well, if this new plan was ever gonna work
I'd have to learn to deal with all this hurt
And so I tried to write of when we split apart
But my heart stood there again - with all the pain that stirred up...

{ch}
I can't write that song
I stare at an empty page
Any words that I put down
My heart seems to erase
Any tune that I dream up
Is never sung before it fades
So, I guess I'm not that strong
And I can't write that song

{br}
I now know how sometimes songs are never made
When their owners are like me and they can't face
The tears our hearts deliver in their place

I can't write that song
I stare at an empty page
Any words that I write down
This heart seems to erase
Any melody I hum
Is never sung before it fades
Like I said, I'm not that strong
And I can't write that song

Guess I'll never be that strong
And I can't write that song

[hardtwistmusic]

Fascinating subject matter.  And very true to life.  I find that it's far easier to write about someone else's pain.  It feels "helpful" and "in control." 

Not that I have never written about my own... but the two writes are VERY different experiences. 

You did an excellent job of capturing that emotional sense of difference.

[IronKnee]

I think this is a fine lyric........a very good twist in the age old concept. Good creative angle.
The only thing left is to hear it within the context of the melody and music.
Can't wait.............
                                              -Tom

[josemar]

nice work, and idea..

[CaliaMoko]

What everybody else said about the subject matter and your skilled treatment. I want to be that good at lyrics. I'll keep trying. I love the line: "My heart seems to erase."

I wonder about one line, though; the first line of the bridge:
"I now know how sometimes songs are never made"

I find the first three words awkward when read out loud and suggest considering a word rearrangement of the words like this: "Now I know how..." Maybe... ?

Vicki

[18 in the 80s]

Very impressive lyric.   Brilliant new angle,  perfectly expressed. 

[Jada_Hayes]

beautifully put x

[GTB]

Clearly you can, brilliantly too.
First two verses are exceptional

[tomcrocus]

Great first line to a song,it sucks you in and keeps you captivated,
i'm really impressed Paul,well done,
                                                  Tom.

[Paulski]

Thanks everyone for the kind remarks.
Made a few tweaks. Vicki - that's how I originally had it - but the musical emphasis is on the wrong word - still might change back..

cheers
Paul

[PaulAds]

Excellent, Paul

You don't want to write THAT song when you can write THIS one

Top drawer once again

Paul

[CaliaMoko]

Oh, I hate it when the right words have the wrong stresses....