"The Whippoorwill" (song in search of instrumental)

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« on: January 21, 2016, 07:00:51 PM »
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Moved here from the lyrics section:  The link is to an a capella version

 THE WHIPPOORWILL.

CHORUS: 
Only the Whippoorwill knows.
And although it’s beyond her comprehension,
Now that the morning wind blows         
And a dark, cold cloud descends on the meadow
Does the whippoorwill sense that the sun might never return.       

VERSE 1. 
Can anyone hazard a wild guess   -- 
What the Whippoorwill heard as she lay in her nest
In the meadow at the edge of the forest where they murdered the king?
And does the Whippoorwill know this could open the door
To another installment of a 1000 year war?
And even if the Whippoorwill knew, would the whippoorwill care?

VERSE 2. 
Is she only concerned with the cat and the fox
And the farmers small son who tries to hit her with rocks? 
And even if the whippoorwill cared would she understand??
Can She understand that the blood of a king
Is a powerful poison that destroys everything
The meadow, the forest, and the brook that flows into the sea?

Only the Whippoorwill knows.
Only the Whippoorwill witnessed the crime
And now that the morning wind blows         
And a dark, cold cloud hangs over the meadow
Does the whippoorwill sense that the sun might never return.       

VERSE 3.
This isn’t the first time the whippoorwill’s seen
Blood running red on the meadow of green.
Does the whippoorwill know that the stakes are much higher this time??
Did the whippoorwill think that the struggle was over
When the body lay quiet and calm in the clover? 
Is it  better for her that she can’t know what’s likely to come???

VERSE 4. 
Trouble will come, it’s a matter of time,
Soon the farmer’s young son will discover the crime,
And the peace of the meadow will soon be a thing of the past? 
Can’t the whippoorwill sense it, the ominous hum
The machinery of war that is certain to come?
Does the whippoorwill shudder with a fear that she can’t comprehend?   

Only the Whippoorwill knows.
Only the Whippoorwill heard what happened
And now that the morning wind blows         
And a dark, cold cloud hangs over the meadow
Does the whippoorwill sense that the sun might never return.
(Return)       

Does the whippoorwill sense that the sun might never return. 

Only the Whippoorwill knows.
And although it’s beyond her comprehension,
Now that the morning wind blows         
And a dark, cold cloud descends on the meadow
Does the whippoorwill sense that the sun might never return.
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« Reply #1 on: January 23, 2016, 10:41:27 PM »
I think this has the hall marks of a great song
So
Whippoorwill - essentially a N.American Night Jar
IMHO
I'd ditch all the stuff about Kings -

Th farmers son bit is great and I'd link it the Civil War
Also
I love some of the imagery and your voice has a haunting quality
Get rid of the words or lines that are difficult to sing acapella
And look for Rhyme assonance in the lines rather than at the end.

PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE

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« Reply #2 on: January 26, 2016, 01:40:32 AM »
I think this has the hall marks of a great song
So
Whippoorwill - essentially a N.American Night Jar
IMHO
I'd ditch all the stuff about Kings -

Th farmers son bit is great and I'd link it the Civil War
Also
I love some of the imagery and your voice has a haunting quality
Get rid of the words or lines that are difficult to sing acapella
And look for Rhyme assonance in the lines rather than at the end.

PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE



It would be hard for me (emotionally) to let go of the reference to Kings.   I had many of the lines written in my head, but it never came together.  I didn't really get interested enough in the lyric myself to get the gumption to finish it until I came up with the "where they murdered the King" line. 

It just wasn't interesting to me until then.  Once I came up with that line, it all fell together and, (in my mind) the whole song is dependent on that line.  Emotionally, I wouldn't feel right with the song without that line.  It's sometimes a little sad that we let our emotions get in the way, but really, art IS emotion far more than we might like to admit.
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« Reply #3 on: February 09, 2016, 07:08:36 PM »
Awesome lyrics man... :) :)