[18 in the 80s]

I can't wait to make the same mistakes

VERSE 1
I told you I was never coming back down this road  
Now I'm driving with the top down looking high and looking low
humming some old 80s tunes on the radio   
Hate to spring this on you babe but I want you to know. 

That I can't wait to make the same mistakes
I can't wait to make the same mistakes 
I can't wait to make the same mistakes  
with you

VERSE 2
You see me and drop your hip, try to hide your smile 
Look away, shake your head, but the pout makes it all worthwhile 
I know we made each other crazy but I promise I'll  take the blame
For all the screaming and shouting if we can do it all again.

CHORUS
And I can't wait to make the same mistakes  
No can't wait to make the same mistakes  
I can't wait to make the same mistakes  
with you   

BRIDGE
Unless you wanna play it safe
Just say the word, I'll walk way
Never to darken your door again
Say goodbye to old mistakes
Or

VERSE 3
We could sit down and try to figure out where it all went wrong  
How romance lost the war of words and where our love has gone
We just gotta find it, doesn't matter how
Come on, take a chance,  take my hand now

CHORUS
And I can't wait to make the same mistakes  
No can't wait to make the same mistakes  
I can't wait to make the same mistakes  
with you   

[seriousfun]

I am really liking this.  Its weLl writteN and has a good structure that should translate nicely to music.

My only concern, and its pretty minor, is wether the last chorus works after the final verse. It just seems to me that lyrically, your final verse paints you into a corner a bit with the chorus. I like the final vers, it is the perfect follow on from the bridge but it appears from the story that they hav moved beyond making mistakes, certainly from wanting to make mistakes at any rate. Maybe some otheR outro rather thatn the chorus? Or a slight variation on the chorus lyric?

What ever the case it is extremely minor as its a very well written lyric as is.

kudos.
Allan.

[hardtwistmusic]

It does what a lyric should do.  It creates interest and curiousity about the two people involved so that the listener/reader kind of creates his/her own backstory to fill in the gaps. 

This lyric does that about as well as any lyric I can think of.  I think this is an inspired write. 

[CaliaMoko]

I can just hear this sung to a good ol' country melody with that slide guitar going in the band. I'd love to hear this set to music. Even though I'm not actually a country fan....

[den]

so many lyrics that are very good never get to the stage of work in progress or even finished, I do hope this one does, cant make up my mind, I get elvis Costello and dave Edmonds, oh well I shall have to wait and see,

[18 in the 80s]

Many thanks for the kind words and encouragement.

I'm working on some acoustic demos and lots more lyrics.

And of course offering feedback to others.

Many thanks

Paul

[schahinmusic]

I love this! I love the title and the honesty in the lyrics.

I can't wait to make the same mistakes WITH YOU! I wish I came up with that line.

[adamfarr]

Really liked this one. It seems to flow well and the verses seem very coherent thematically.

Also like the way the bridge gives a different perspective.

Your verse lines are really long which I quite like, though it doesn't always make for the most commercial feel.

Look forward to more!

[18 in the 80s]

Thanks again guys

More to follow!

[josemar]

I enjoyed the sentiment in this....it's a good idea....

Simple chorus too with repetition...

The bridge - Should that contain the Title word of Mistake? minor gripe...I guess

it could a driving rock song right?..I mean full on guitars etc....not so much easy Eagles type rock...