I've been meaning to comment on your lyrics but a heavy cold got in the way.
I thought the original chorus was far better than your latest re-write. I've made a couple of changes and removed the last line. I think they are very powerful and the chorus should finish on the hurt rather than the plea for her to return.
You sweet thief.
you stole my breath,
stole my heart,
stole all my thoughts,
and then you tore my world apart.
Feel free to ignore me if you disagree.
Keith