[Classicvw]

Hey Guys. I've changed things around again (26/01/16). tell me what you think?


Verse 1

Imagine a humming bird losing its flight,
or the sun losing its light.
Cause that's what it will be like
sleeping without you tonight.


Pre-chorus

Maybe we weren’t serious at the start
But I’ve come to realise over time
Without you near me,
You are the only one that stole my heart


Chorus

Sweet thief
You stole my breath,
Stole my heart
Sweet thief
you stole all my thoughts
then tore my world apart.
Baby please, come back to me...
My sweet thief!


Verse 2

Imagine gazing on a tropical shore,
or a puppy you adore,
cause that's what it will be like
seeing your blue eyes once more.


Bridge

I long to take you by the hand
and kiss you like I did then.
I want to grab your waist
and hold you close again.


Chorus

Sweet thief
You stole my breath,
Stole my heart
Sweet thief
you stole all my thoughts
then tore my world apart.
Baby please, come back to me...
My sweet thief!


Outro

Shouldn’t have let you go, I was a fool
thought I needed a single life
But what I needed
was a life with you   
My sweet thief (I Love you)



© Madison Romano 15 January 2016








Verse 1
 
Imagine a bird losing its flight,                          
or a bulb losing its light.
Cause that's what it will be like  
sleeping alone tonight.
I'm fighting to regain that feelin'
To begin working on healin.
Why can't I get you out of my head?
Why are you so amazin?


Chorus

You sweet thief
You stole my breath,
Stole my heart
Stole all my thoughts
then tore my world apart.
Baby baby please, come back to me...
My sweet thief!


Verse 2

Imagine gazing on a tropical shore,
or a puppy you adore,
cause that's what it will be like
seeing your eyes once more.
and don't start thinking you are one of many        
no one compares to you, baby
Just can't get you out of my head.
You are in my thoughts daily


Bridge

Why can’t I take you by the hand
and kiss you like I did then.
Why can’t I grab your waist
and hold you close again.


Chorus

You sweet thief
You stole my breath,
Stole my heart
Stole all my thoughts
then tore my world apart.
Baby baby please, come back to me...
My sweet thief!
      

Verse 3

Maybe this song is an explanation
of what I feel.
Maybe it is about letting you know
my love is real.             
If the world was an art gallery,
you would be my Mona Lisa.
Oh I want you back, Harrietta
Harrietta please. My sweet thief





Outro

Harrietta (please)

Harrietta (please)                  

Harrietta (please)



© Madison Romano 15 January 2016

[diademgrove]

No problem with you posting new amended lyrics, its what the forum is about. But every time you create a new thread you knock somebody off the bottom of the page into page 2.

You could just add the lyrics to an existing thread and amend the title to show you've changed the lyrics. Some people amend the first post in the thread. I'm not keen on that as I sometimes like to look back at the existing lyrics and see how they changed.

No offence meant. Keep up the good work.

Keith

[Classicvw]

so sorry man! should i do that now? or is it too late?

[diademgrove]

so sorry man! should i do that now? or is it too late?

I think its best to leave this thread as it is, let people comment and just update it if you re-write your lyrics. No real harm done.

Keith

[Classicvw]

Updated*

[KaelJay]

I've been seeing so many "Harrietta #1, #2 etc." in the lyric section. I really wanted to see the fuss and whatnot. To me, It's a sweet and pop-like song that many people would sing. And the title gives in a Spanish or guitar feel when I try to imagine the melody.

So many metaphors I don't quite get. I didn't get "If the world was an art gallery, you would be my Mona Lisa". There were so many questions on my head on why is that? Is it because the girl was beautiful or artistic. How can the world be an art gallery? You might need to address or answer those questions some in the song. And some lines were too cheesy. I get cheesy, but not too much.

In verse 1, you switch the story too soon, I might put it. From 'sleeping alone' to 'one of my many' I think can't fit together well. Stick to the 'sticking alone' story in this verse.

In verse 2,The heroin metaphor is very troubling to me. I think the song should be sweet and quaint. That line makes it very awkward, and defeats the purpose of the puppy and tropical metaphors,

In the Pre-chorus, I think "It's agreeing none" is awkward when you say it. Maybe "It's agreeing to no one" is better and more suited.

The chorus structure is very odd and clumsy. Maybe make it into four lines?


Good solid work with some quirks to be fixed! I hope this would help you.

[Oldbutyet]

hey guys!

so i've updated them again. Please tell me what you think




Verse 1
Imagine a bird losing its flight,                         
or a bulb losing its light.
Cause that’s what it will be like 
sleeping alone tonight.
And don't start thinking you are one of many.
No one even compares to you, honey

Verse 2

Imagine gazing  a tropical shore,
or a puppy you adore,
cause that’s what it will be like
seeing your eyes once more. 
The way heroin makes a junkie addicted,             
the thought of you just leaves me fixated.


Pre Chorus

My head wants to let you go.
But it's so much easier said than done.
My heart’s saying no.
It’s agreeing none.


Chorus

You sweet thief.
you stole my breath,
you stole my heart,
you stole my thoughts,
then torn my world apart.

      

Verse 3

Maybe this song is an explanation
of what I feel.
Maybe it is about letting you know
my love is real.             
If the world was an art gallery,
you would be my Mona Lisa.
So please take me back, Harrietta


Outro

Harrietta (please)

Harrietta (please)                  

Harrietta (please)

Okay my thoughts but im thinking you need to softening this down a bit so im going just rearrange your first verse, okay.

"Can you imagine a bulb losing its light.

Im sleeping alone tonight.

Can you imagine a bird losing its flight

Cause that’s what its like

So don't start thinking you are one of many.

No honey, nothing compares to you"

As i said softening it down and let your music of thoughts fill the gaps and rearrange whatever.

[Classicvw]

haha thanks man. the metaphore 'if the world was an art gallery, you would be my Mona Lisa'. Its referring to how beautiful she is. So if the world was filled with beautiful things (paintings) then she would be the most beautiful thing (Mona Lisa). I got the idea off a kanye west song haha.

yeah you are absoluetly right! it does change to fast. didn't see that before. and the same with using heroin with a sweet verse. I need to work on that.

would it sound better if the chorus was like this.....

you sweet thief.
stole my breath,
you stole my heart,
stole all my thoughts
and torn my world apart

yeah! helped massively! thanks so much

[Classicvw]

hey guys!

so i've updated them again. Please tell me what you think




Verse 1
Imagine a bird losing its flight,                          
or a bulb losing its light.
Cause that’s what it will be like  
sleeping alone tonight.
And don't start thinking you are one of many.
No one even compares to you, honey

Verse 2

Imagine gazing  a tropical shore,
or a puppy you adore,
cause that’s what it will be like
seeing your eyes once more.  
The way heroin makes a junkie addicted,              
the thought of you just leaves me fixated.


Pre Chorus

My head wants to let you go.
But it's so much easier said than done.
My heart’s saying no.
It’s agreeing none.


Chorus

You sweet thief.
you stole my breath,
you stole my heart,
you stole my thoughts,
then torn my world apart.

      

Verse 3

Maybe this song is an explanation
of what I feel.
Maybe it is about letting you know
my love is real.             
If the world was an art gallery,
you would be my Mona Lisa.
So please take me back, Harrietta


Outro

Harrietta (please)

Harrietta (please)                  

Harrietta (please)

Okay my thoughts but im thinking you need to softening this down a bit so im going just rearrange your first verse, okay.

"Can you imagine a bulb losing its light.

Im sleeping alone tonight.

Can you imagine a bird losing its flight

Cause that’s what its like

So don't start thinking you are one of many.

No honey, nothing compares to you"

As i said softening it down and let your music of thoughts fill the gaps and rearrange whatever.

cheers man!

I'll take it onboard but i think i might leave it as it is as don't think that part sounds too bad at the moment

[Oldbutyet]

Dont look to hard in lyric form in all honesty they're just rearrangement of thoughts but i will say, don't throw away anything   

[Classicvw]

Do you reckon on the 1 verse, i change it to.......

Imagine a bird losing its flight,                         
or a bulb losing its light.
Cause that’s what it will be like 
sleeping alone tonight.
I’m fighting to regain that feelin’
To begin working on healin


then on verse 2 i change it to.......

Imagine gazing a tropical shore,
or a puppy you adore,
cause that’s what it will be like
seeing your eyes once more. 
And don't start thinking you are one of many.
No one even compares to you, honey

Does this sound better or not? i totally don't have a clue haha

[KaelJay]

I think you're starting to have an idea. I like the new verse one, I think that's great!

On verse two, the last line could be..

"No one can ever compare you, honey"
I think it makes more sense (I think) than the last one. Then the rest of this verse it good

What do you think?

[KaelJay]

Dont look to hard in lyric form in all honesty they're just rearrangement of thoughts but i will say, don't throw away anything   

I may have to disagree with you, good sir. I think a more organized set of writing gives you a clearer mind of melody. Please correct me if I'm wrong. I would love to hear your say.

Mikael

[Oldbutyet]

Do you reckon on the 1 verse, i change it to.......

Imagine a bird losing its flight,                         
or a bulb losing its light.
Cause that’s what it will be like 
sleeping alone tonight.
I’m fighting to regain that feelin’
To begin working on healin


then on verse 2 i change it to.......

Imagine gazing a tropical shore,
or a puppy you adore,
cause that’s what it will be like
seeing your eyes once more. 
And don't start thinking you are one of many.
No one even compares to you, honey

Does this sound better or not? i totally don't have a clue haha

To early to tell man, ill read more in the comming days 

[Oldbutyet]

Dont look to hard in lyric form in all honesty they're just rearrangement of thoughts but i will say, don't throw away anything   

I may have to disagree with you, good sir. I think a more organized set of writing gives you a clearer mind of melody. Please correct me if I'm wrong. I would love to hear your say.

Mikael

Im sitting thinking but your organized set.

Whats you writing.