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18 in the 80s

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« on: January 10, 2016, 09:35:22 PM »
Only two verses to this one which is intended as 3-minutes of fast-paced fun power pop opus.

She was a red head
And when I say red
I mean red like
Red like a brake light

Or a Lamborghini
Or a Bay Watch bikini
Red like red paint anyway
It werent her natural shade

And it was subject to change
Like Man United  away
But at the time we met
Like I said, It was red


PRE-CHORUS
And for a while she was the be all and end all
She meant more to me than music and football
But red heads can be fiery,  spitefull and feisty
She dumped me and didn't let me down nicely

CHORUS
I could cry, I could beg
She'd just shake her head
Which as I may have said
Was red


VERSE TWO
And she had the kind of eyes
She could hide behind
You know like
A disguise

And you'd never have an inkling
Of What she was thinking
And I never saw her smile
Or knew if she was lying

I could never see what was in her head
Which like I said
When we met
Was red

PRE-CHORUS
And I know you're sitting there thinking don't be a jerk
You and her? Come on it was never gonna work
But you know what it's like, what can you do?
When a drop dead gorgeous  red head makes you blue

CHORUS
I could cry, I could beg
She'd just shake her head
Which as I may have said
Was red



Thoughts,  comments,  feedback much appreciated.
Paul - 18 in the 80s

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« Reply #1 on: January 10, 2016, 10:11:12 PM »
love it, great, wouldn't change a single word, very original, if it sounds as good as I think it will you have a winner, I want to hear this.

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« Reply #2 on: January 12, 2016, 11:21:53 PM »
Thanks Den!

Demo is in the works as we speak !
Paul - 18 in the 80s

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« Reply #3 on: January 13, 2016, 12:07:34 AM »
Only comment is - She's not a natural Red-head but you slightly slag off natural red-heads - is this fair. just sayin'

Was walking down the street when a brake-light red went by.
the woman I was with said ' What does she think she is - a lit match
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« Reply #4 on: January 13, 2016, 09:29:50 PM »
That was a total hoot :)
Great wry sense of humour throughout had me chuckling.
Like the rhyming too.
No faults found from me - like to hear it!

Paul

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« Reply #5 on: January 14, 2016, 12:32:23 PM »
Absolutely LOVE it,enough said,
                                           Tom.

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« Reply #6 on: January 14, 2016, 12:52:32 PM »
So strong all the way through, love it.

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« Reply #7 on: January 14, 2016, 07:42:51 PM »
Many thanks to everyone for the kind words,  as a new guy its very encouraging for me.

I'll be posting many more in the coming weeks and keep looking for a collaborator to realise my son's into demos.

Thanks again

Paul
Paul - 18 in the 80s