Hello guys
Thank you for those great feedbacks.
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CaliaMoko: Thanks for your feedback
Now I can see where my mistakes are. Actually, I already set the chords for this song. Now I can make adjustments to it, thanks to you
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KaelJay: Maayong gabii.
Yes, you're right this is somewhat
generic; that's what I was rooting for, hence the employment of simple words.
The structure of this song is as follows: Verse-Refrain-Chorus-modified Verse-Chorus-Bridge-Chorus. I edited my post and labeled the lyrics. Thank you for your feedback, I'll keep it in mind.
I'm trying to experiment on different song forms and writing techniques, too.
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mickeytwonames: Oh..I didn't know it had a similar song entitled the same. Thanks for the tip
Vic