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Vintage54
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Another side to christmas.
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December 10, 2015, 10:16:22 PM »
Here's a song for the time of year.
Another side to christmas.
There's still food upon the table
But the plates are pushed aside
The large and lesser appetites
Have all been satisfied
The drink is flowing freely
The fire burning bright
And softly the old radio
Is singing silent night
But there's another side to christmas
Some shadows on the street
Thin shadows cast by people
That don't have enough to eat
Some show candles glowing
Some a wintry scene
The robin and red berries
Of the holy evergreen
Some show the nativity
Neath the star of Bethlehem
Some say "Merry christmas"
Some "Goodwill to all men"
But there's another side to christmas
The greeting cards don't show
Like the homeless beggar shivering
In the freezing wind and snow
The kids got what they wanted
Crosby's dream came true
Even the dog got a rubber bone
To get his teeth into
The wives they got their jewellery
The husbands got their drills
And St Marys bells were lost among
The ringing of the tills
But there's another side to christmas
Out of sight and earshot
Like those families of refugees
St Nicholas forgot
That other side of christmas
We know we should engage
But give no more than passing thought
Before we turn the page
So happy christmas and give thanks
That your name's not on that page
And your'e not standing on the wrong side
Of this Ebeneezer age.
Best wishes
Vintage54
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GTB
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Valar Morghulis
Re: Another side to christmas.
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December 11, 2015, 07:38:52 PM »
I love this song, excellent for Xmas, not too cheesy or preachy. You got the balance right for me.
Merry Xmas
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den
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Posts: 114
Re: Another side to christmas.
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December 11, 2015, 08:49:30 PM »
oh dear, he's gone and raised the bloody bar again, excellent.
regards den.
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PaulAds
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Re: Another side to christmas.
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December 11, 2015, 09:03:46 PM »
somebody please write a great xmas song using these lyrics
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mickeytwonames
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Re: Another side to christmas.
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December 11, 2015, 10:28:10 PM »
The large and lesser appetites - What a fantastic line
My only comment would be the last line of the verse being a perfect rhyme make it a tad predictable
It seems to me 'But there's another side to christmas ....' is a chorus/reprise and it could be the same for each verse (putting on the pedant hat you write about the other SIDES of Christmas) so one sharp contrast between the haves and have nots would make the point. IMHO
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hardtwistmusic
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Re: Another side to christmas.
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December 12, 2015, 04:38:31 AM »
Here's a song for the time of year.
A (very) few suggestions. This was a stunningly thoughtful job of comparing what Christmas is supposed to be (the feel good Christmas Myth) with what Christmas really is - a temporary suspension of an un-necessarily grim reality.
It is a songwriter's duty (imo) to expose such things. Not necessarily in every song, but when it can be done. You have more than met your burden here for some time to come.
Another side to christmas.
There's still food upon the table
But the plates are pushed aside
The large and lesser appetites
Have all been satisfied
The drink is flowing freely
The fire burning bright
And softly the old radio
Is singing silent night
But there's another side to christmas
Some shadows on the street
Thin shadows cast by people
Without
That don't have
enough to eat
Some show candles glowing
Some a wintry scene
The robin and red berries
Of the holy evergreen
Some show the nativity
Neath the star of Bethlehem
Some say "Merry christmas"
Some "Goodwill to all men"
But there's another side to christmas
The greeting cards don't show
Like the homeless beggar shivering
In the freezing wind and snow
The kids got what they wanted
Crosby's dream came true
Even the dog got a rubber bone
To get his teeth into
The wives they got their jewellery
The husbands got their drills
And St Marys bells were lost among
The ringing of the tills
But there's another side to christmas
Out of sight and earshot
Like those families of refugees
St Nicholas forgot
That other side of christmas
We know we should engage
But give no more than passing thought
Before we turn the page
So happy christmas.
and
Give
your
thanks.
That
Your name's not on that page
And your'e not standing on the wrong side
Of this Ebeneezer age.
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tomcrocus
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Posts: 459
Re: Another side to christmas.
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December 12, 2015, 08:00:58 AM »
Top drawer Vintage,
i don't really care much for the usual run of
the mill christmas songs,except maybe one or two,but i'd love to
hear this one put to music,
best wishes,Tom.
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Paulski
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Re: Another side to christmas.
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December 15, 2015, 05:50:27 PM »
Lovely Christmas lyric Vintage.
It has a classic feel to it with nary a nit to be found under this tree.
Happy holidays (on this side anyway
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Neil C
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Re: Another side to christmas.
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December 23, 2015, 04:42:48 PM »
Vintage
Evocative picture painted here. Particularly like the ' bells and tills' and 'passing pages' lines but all in all up to your very highest standards as usual.
Now just wait for the sleigh bells, can you hear them in the distance i wonder...
Neil
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