First ever song that I attempted to write and produce in GarageBand. Now written 8 from slow ballads to 80s pop and a real mix of things which I'll share when allowed(only one in 14 days I think is a rule) as they are just sitting around gathering virtual dust now! Although the basic lyrics come to me quite easily I don't play any instruments properly so it's very painful recording guitar and keyboard/synth, pretty much one finger or simple chords, bar by bar, repeated until it sounds somewhat acceptable!).
Any thoughts on lyrics, song structure very welcome.
Can also critique my singing and playing but that's less valuable as I've no ambitions of being a singer or musician, but one day hoping to find some people to work with who require lyrics or any other input I can provide.
[Edited to provide link to the updated version of song, not the original version, which is still on soundcloud]
https://soundcloud.com/v8burble/get-out-new-versionThis one is meant to be a duet with the guy first, girl second and then both singing the final two choruses but no friends have been willing to sing the girls part so it's just me.
[Guy]
Get out
Get out my life
I’ve had enough, enough of all the strife
I’ve waited for so long, you’ve asked me to hold on
But now I can’t cope any more
You’re gone
Get out my life
You know what’s wrong, you’ve given me nothing right
I’ve waited for something, you’ve given me nothing
Any now I won’t take it again
What’s wrong
You knew this was coming soon
You had your chance but still did nothing new
I’m moving my life on, without you just holding on
And now I can be free again
Starting life again, Moving on today
Living once again, Enjoying every way
Forget what went before, I’m walking out the door
Turning back on everything you’ve given me before
[Gal]
Get out
You’ve ruined me
Spoiled everything, you touched, including me
I gave you completely, you spent my love cheaply
And emptied my soul piece by piece
You’re gone
And now I’m over you
It won’t take me long, to find love, I never knew
And each of your kisses, no love, just near misses
Will never touch my lips again
Starting life again, Moving on today
Living once again, Now I’ve found my way
Forget what was before, I’m walking out the door
Turning back on everything that’s ruined life before
[Guy and Gal together with harmonies]
Would it be enough, to try and change our ways
Would it even work, we’re running out of days
Now the love has gone, I’m stronger than before
I’m got my life again, now you’re walking out that door
It’ll never be enough, you’ll never change your ways
It could never work, no matter how many days
The love we had is gone, I’m truly over you
And now from this day on – I’m through, we’re through
Written by Phil Stewart - July 2015