I always get excited when you post new stuff Verlon buy this one has me divided in afraid.
The verses are outstanding and unlike others, I have no problem with the overuse of 'heart'.
Unfortunately the chorus just didn't do it for me. I've read it several times and still can't get excited by it. The verses are so clever the chorus just let's them down. There's nothing unique about it and feels at odds with everything else.
Sorry if I've come across as over critical but i just think you're so much better than that chorus.
Those "critics" who tell us what is right with a song do us a real service.
Those who tell us what is wrong with the song do us a double service. There is no such thing as "too critical". I appreciate and respect your candor and would NEVER want you to flatter.
Thank you.
