Hello!
This gets off to a flyer, love the opening 2 lines. But after that, it loses it's way. The structure is odd, and i'm struggling with flow. Five lines, chorus four, four again, then two, chorus, then six to end. Needs sorting for me. Also "Mummy" not keen on that, needs an alternative. Line 3 is poor, and line 2 of the chorus, is baffling. Lines 1 and 3 of the second verse, also don't make sense. I'm sorry if i'm coming across as harsh, i hate being critical. I feel where your'e coming from with this, and i'm not unmoved. I just think, with a little more thought, and tweaking, this could be a whole lot better. But you have potential, no doubt about that, hope i didn't discourage you.
Vintage54