[igg]

In the spirit of social justice songs....something I wrote a couple of years ago....

While At Home You Know They Were Dancing
lyrics/music © I. Wolosenko

Verse 1 (4/4 time)
With uniforms and polished guns, they lied and filled our heads
The sound and fury of this war ...was glorious they said
They called it cost of freedom
They called it duty clear
The rattle of the deadly drum was all that we could hear

Chorus: (3/4 time)
While at home, you know they were dancing
Pouring wine from crystal carafes
All around them, their generals prancing ..
Counting bodies and playing for laughs
And their chandeliers sparkled so brightly
Their banter so perfectly wry
While fathers and brothers of sisters and mothers...
Were secretly sentenced to die

Verse 2
The call was made, the order signed, the papers did agree
We had to show them where we stood, we couldn't wait and see
Our weapons were so mighty
This war would soon be won
And all we had to do for them was operate the guns

Chorus 2
While at home, you know they were dancing
Moving softly in tender embrace
Their accountants were posting their profits
Such pleasure on each greedy face
Flags waving.... and colorful bunting
Music swelling with patriot's pride
There were plenty of speeches from prominent leeches
While the corpses were piled up outside

Verse 3
On monumental stages , our leaders were displayed
Though victory was just in reach, they urged us all to pray
Old bishops dust to dusted
And blessed the fallen brave
The wounded, and the widowed wives wept at the open graves

While at home, you know they were dancing (fade)

[rightly]

that's a really good bit of writing!!
have you recorded it as a song?

I'm a song writer myself, I'd be proud to have written this

[PaulAds]

That's fantastic, Igg

So many great lines...rather than quoting them all and saying how much I enjoyed them...I'm just going to read it again  

Top stuff!

[Vintage54]

    Hey igg,
      Damn good write, damn good. Love the contrast between those in the way of harm, and their loved ones, and those that set the spark and profit. Though the choruses are good, the strongest parts for me, are the concluding lines of each verse, powerful stuff, that leaves a deep impression. I can't find fault with this, it's too good.

                                 Blown away
                                   Vintage54

[Paulski]

Hi igg

Really good write!
I love the contrast verse/chorus - can feel the harsh reality in the verses and the almost laissez faire attitude in the choruses. Good call on changing to 3/4 time - the high-brows can waltz thru life to that!
No nits from me - solid stuff.

Paul

[johnlondon]

Hi Igg,

Another excellent lyric, the theme is right up my alley. Favourite lines,

"There were plenty of speeches from prominent leeches
While the corpses were piled up outside"

Interesting use of timing, could suggest a march to a charge or gallop.

[igg]

Hi and thanks for your kind responses....

Rightly -  I have recorded this. Guitar with a cello line as counterpoint....but I'm not happy with the recording just yet(sigh)... I intend to try again in the near future and post it at that time.....

Paul - The only thing I can think of to say is thank you, my friend!!

Vintage - As usual, your comments are kind to a fault...I appreciate the opportunity to share with you...

Paul - Thanks for the kind feedback...  The 3/4 change sets up a poignant musical contrast that I hope supports the lyric and intent... and unfortunately, the reality that surrounds us...

John - Thank you ...The waltz certainly sets the scene up in a continental, historical way --- yet through my lyrics, I hope to point out the obscenity that continues unabated...