[Stan9007]

Hi everyone! I hope to hear your recommendations soon. All critics are welcome.

1.
You know I have lost my way
My life is a rainy day.
I can see the reason why

Some say I should get away
All my feelings stay the same
I look at the rainy sky


Chorus:

I know the clouds would go away
If I saw you.
You'd say "that's ok,
There will be better days"
I'm like a kid who wants to play
When I'm with you.
You make the sun break through.

2.
It was one of those nice days
When I saw your prettiest face
Since then I can't break away.

You left without any trace
Your heart was an open space
All I want is you to stay

Chorus:

I know the clouds would go away
If I saw you.
You'd say "that's ok,
There will be better days"
I'm like a kid who wants to play
When I'm with you.
You make the sun break through.

[Vintage54]

       Hello Stan,
          This is threatening to go bigtime, but leaves too much unsaid, lacks detail, but i like it anyway. Pretty, i think would sit better than "prettiest" and another verse or two would help. Hope this comes across as positive and not the the other side of the the coin, because this is promising, don't stop trying.

                              Vintage54

[Stan9007]

Thank you! I've changed the word prettiest as you said, I agree  that pretty sounds better. Actually this must be positive, I hope so:) and I can't add one more verse just because of the size of the song, unfortunately( and also I've changed "my life is a rainy day" to "my life as a cloudy day" because recently I saw almost the similar line of another singer. His song contains "my life is just a rainy day"