[Hooded Singer]

or other feedback

Drunken Feelings

It’s a quiet night maybe we’ll be alright
Small talk on the corner
Cigarette held in your delicate hand
You tell me your next plan

Just put me beside you after I’ve had a few
Liquid confidence does all the work
I care about you despite what your friends say
Just because we’re intoxicated doesn’t mean we don’t mean what we say

Can’t walk in a straight line
But we’ll be fine with our hands intertwined
We’ll make it to the next bar
Dancing again with drinks in our hands
Each other on our minds

Sleep well
Sleep soft
Night is gone
Drinks will wear off

[hardtwistmusic]

or other feedback

Drunken Feelings

It’s a quiet night maybe we’ll be alright
Small talk on the corner
Cigarette held in your delicate hand
You tell me your next plan

Just put me beside you after I’ve had a few
Liquid confidence does all the work
I care about you despite what your friends say
Just because we’re intoxicated doesn’t mean we don’t mean what we say

Can’t walk in a straight line
But we’ll be fine with our hands intertwined
We’ll make it to the next bar
Dancing again with drinks in our hands
Each other on our minds

Sleep well
Sleep soft
Night is gone
Drinks will wear off

VERSE:  
It’s a quiet night
maybe we’ll probably be alright
Small talk on the corner
Cigarette held
in your delicate hand
You tell me your next plan

CHORUS:  
Just put me Let me stand beside you
after I’ve had a few
Liquid confidence does all the work
I (still) care about you
despite what your friends say I pray you mean it when you say you'll stay.  
Just because we’re intoxicated
Being drunk don't have to mean we don’t mean what we say

VERSE:  NOTE  --  I changed the sequence because this didn't originally match the first verse.
But we’ll be fine
with our hands intertwined
Can’t walk in a straight line
It's fuzzy and grey
as we make our way
to the next bar down the line.  

REPEAT CHORUS:  

VERSE:  
Sand on the dance floor
The poster on the door.
Says "Welcome - Come in and unwind."      
Dancing again We dance in the sand.
with drinks in our hands
Each other on our minds.

REPEAT CHORUS:    

BRIDGE TO OUT:
  
Sleep well
Sleep soft
Night is gone
Drinks will wear off.
Will our feelings carry on?  

That is plenty of song.  With a musical bridge, this will go at least three minutes and twenty seconds this way.  You can use any or all or none of these suggestions as you wish.

My best advice (if you use my lyrical suggestions) is to improve them and make them your own.  I really didn't spend enough time on this for them to be adequate.  Just a suggested direction you can go.  

Hope that helps.

[PopTodd]

Maybe it doesn't NEED to be any longer.
Maybe it's a song like Guided By Voices uses in their albums --- to sort of fill space between songs. Not "filler" per se, as it actually has a purpose: more of a link between songs than filler, I guess.
In fact, not only would it work well in that sense, but it also has a very GBV feel to it that I kinda like just the way that it is.

But, if you are really are wanting to make it longer, maybe try adding some space between verses. Add some instrumental passages, especially if you are going to re-record with a full band.

If not, just leave it as it is. It paints a lovely picture (or, a very relatable picture).

[Hooded Singer]

Maybe it doesn't NEED to be any longer.

I kinda like just the way that it is.

Hmm okay thanks, I jammed out with it in my bedroom this morning just as is,

Can you feel it? 

[PopTodd]

Maybe it doesn't NEED to be any longer.

I kinda like just the way that it is.

Hmm okay thanks, I jammed out with it in my bedroom this morning just as is,

Can you feel it? 

I like it. It's just an album track -- an evocative piece of filler that can add a lot to an album, if used in the right way, with the right sequencing.
Dig it.