[Reece!]

I posted this song last year I think and never got any replies. The song is about online trolls, I was very much inspired by Lily Allen's 'URL BADMAN' was wondering if you had any ideas where I could go next with the song or even help with what I have so far. I am also open to collaborations if anyone interested.

KEYBOARD GANGSTER

Just words, no actions
Testing people just to get a reaction
Say what you say
Press enter, social networking has became your center

You could've just ignored it
Always got to be involved in other people's shit
Always got to have your say
It always has to go your way
You believe the world has fucked you over
So you think it has a price to pay

[CHORUS]
You're just a keyboard, a keyboard gangster
Living like this won't get you far
A keyboard gangster, is all you are
Thinking you're a top man, even a star
But really you're just a keyboard, a keyboard gangster

[PaulAds]

a great idea for a song, Reece...very topical and the title is a catchy and amusing one 

just a thought...

maybe it'd be an idea to throw yourself into the part and write it from the protagonists perspective? explaining what he(she)'s doing and why they're so full of hatred and spite...they always seem to be able to justify their actions in their own tiny little minds...

as someone once said "don't get it right...get it written" 

good luck!

[adamfarr]

Reece - I think an excellent start. Nothing wrong at all with what's there (and the adult langauge is probably correct for the scenario). It does seem to be about 2/3 of a song though. Verse 1 and the midsection set the scene. I think it now needs some progression using the verses.

I like Paul's idea of looking at it from the narrator's point of view and how they got to be how they are. Or you might add something about the victims and the vicious circle of being cruel which just generates more cruelty... Actually I like the "vicious circle" or "vicious cycle" concept - if you did some free writing around that maybe some ideas would come.

[Paulski]

Hi Reece

Good title - hook and good hook placement IMO.
Seems like it could be structured better - same number of lines in each verse etc.

Good luck with this!
Paul