Verse two works best so far to me. It is most coherent. It's actually very nice. The rest, though, feel like a series of disconnected events in search of a unifying theme.
The first verse is very poetic and has some interesting imagery, but its narrative is confusing. Why are people flying and why are some of them naked? Now, if this is an abstract expression of their emotional state, that's fine. But the audience needs to understand who they are and what they want.
"A lady walked by and dropped a casual look
I didn't mean to fall in love but that's all it took"
For me, this is the core and the engine of the song: to get the girl. It says who is speaking, why and what he wants. Everything else should flow from here. It doesn't necessarily have to be the very first line, but it is the destination and every action should move you closer to that objective.
