[Mutrins]

Hey all!

I've been working on a track and would love some feedback. It kind of came out of nowhere and turned into a sort of wedding/engagement/proposal/couples type of song. I imagine a flash mob happening? lol. Either way, would love to hear some thoughts.

https://soundcloud.com/micky-shiloah/were-in-love-sodemo/s-d3t4y

Thanks so much!
Micky

Lyrics:
Every day's a holiday when I'm with you
Every day the sky is a perfect blue
Every day I thank my lucky stars
Cuz I don't know where I'd be without you

Probably unhappy somewhere all alone
Sitting on a park bench on my phone
Watching all the couples and thinking
There's something missing in my life

But I am so glad I'm not dying by myself
Unless you go first, then I'm dying by myself
Yea but statistically speaking we've got some years left
So let's go be in love...

Chorus:
We're in love so you can touch my body now
And I can touch your body now
We can touch our bodies now

And if you feel like it
We can dance to the rhythm in the pale moonlight
Or we can catch a movie tonight
Or go to bed and call it a night

(we can do anything, cuz we're in love...)

I'd be really sad if we ever broke up
I couldn't come over and retrieve my stuff
You would be my Gotye
And I would have my friends collect my records
and then change my number

Cuz I can't imagine a life without you
I'd definitely be in a support group
Telling everybody
I think there's something missing in my life

But I am so glad we're not dying all alone
I'll have my tombstone next to your tombstone
Cuz realistically we have a limited time here
So let's go be in love...

(Come on)

Chorus:
We're in love so you can eat as much as you wanna
I'll eat as much as I wanna
We'll go to the gym tomorrow

And if you feel like it
I would like it if we spend the rest of our lives
Giving kisses when we say good night
Even after a really big fight
Cuz we're in love...


We're in love so you can touch my body now
And I can touch your body now
We can touch our bodies now

And if you feel like it
We can dance to the rhythm in the pale moonlight
Or we can catch a movie tonight
Or go to bed and call it a night

[Skub]

Yo Micky.

This is a lovely,effervescent,bubbly pop tune.

Great singing,great song and to my ears a clean,clear production.

Ticks all the boxes,I hope it does well for ya man. 

[MonnoDB]

Hey @Mutrins - this is very catchy!

Great vocal Micky!

There's just one tiny thing that caught my ear. Is there a very slight timing issue (to my ears!) at 2.07 / 08 '....dying all alone'? Your phrasing is very tight to the rhythm but it seems a tiny bit out there .. A bit of a cheek me noting that as my own phrasing is very fluid but I thought I'd mention it. Of course, I could be imagining it! In which case, ignore me.

It's very smooth and polished I must say.. Sounds radio-ready!

Karen

[Liam]

 Hi really good couple of points one for me is I think it goes on to Long and the other is this lyric it doesn’t really work for me

But I am so glad I'm not dying by myself
Unless you go first, then I'm dying by myself

But that’s me just being picky well done

[IronKnee]

Hey there Mutrins......a good melodic hook in the title...Good job.....I really like this. Awesome chorus, and although the build up leading to the chorus may be a tad long, the pay off is satisfying!!
Always some good vocals and production, from you. Kudos!!
                                                                                                 -Tom

[Mutrins]

Yo Micky.

This is a lovely,effervescent,bubbly pop tune.

Great singing,great song and to my ears a clean,clear production.

Ticks all the boxes,I hope it does well for ya man. 

Thank you so much!!!

[Mutrins]

Hey @Mutrins - this is very catchy!

Great vocal Micky!

There's just one tiny thing that caught my ear. Is there a very slight timing issue (to my ears!) at 2.07 / 08 '....dying all alone'? Your phrasing is very tight to the rhythm but it seems a tiny bit out there .. A bit of a cheek me noting that as my own phrasing is very fluid but I thought I'd mention it. Of course, I could be imagining it! In which case, ignore me.

It's very smooth and polished I must say.. Sounds radio-ready!

Karen

Thank you so much!!!

Will go back and listen to that part

[Mutrins]

Hi really good couple of points one for me is I think it goes on to Long and the other is this lyric it doesn’t really work for me

But I am so glad I'm not dying by myself
Unless you go first, then I'm dying by myself

But that’s me just being picky well done

Thanks!! I get it it's kind of a strange lyric! haha

[Mutrins]

Hey there Mutrins......a good melodic hook in the title...Good job.....I really like this. Awesome chorus, and although the build up leading to the chorus may be a tad long, the pay off is satisfying!!
Always some good vocals and production, from you. Kudos!!
                                                                                                 -Tom

Thank you so much, Tom!!!

[Morefrog Jones]

Its certainly got something.....A bit of a Euro feel.......A bit over-complicated at times and strange/odd lyrically but overall loads of potential.

[Mutrins]

Thank you for listening!!

[redrhodie]

Hi Micky,

Nice production and singing. Some of the words made me slightly uncomfortable. I must be getting old. Haha. Great job.

Lynn

[pompeyjazz]

A perfect modern little pop tune. Very catchy. There is something a little Eurovision about this but I guess that means you've sold your hook. Impressive