[Lejonhjarta]

Hello everyone. This is the first song I'm posting here. A little nervous. I wrote this song after my and my fiance's dog ate my glasses(I know...) and I had enough of the dogs(we had 2), so we basically had a huge fight and I ended up saying you can have the dog, but not me. It got pretty serious and alot of shit came to the surface and we're still trying to work this out. This song is part of processing it all for me.

So it's about making people realize that there are problems and making them deal with it and not just stick their head in the sand because without them in your life you have nothing of real worth.

https://soundcloud.com/adamsjoberg/all-i-got

Lyrics:

V1
Sorry, I made you choose between
What you are and what you wanna be
Sorry, for pointing a gun at your head
Didnt seem like such a crazy thing back then

Pre
You know what they say about me, baby

Hook
That without you all I got's
a fair sized beard, an empty cradle and a raincoat gathering dust
Without you, babe, my future's on the line

V2
Baby, take a swing at me
One moment's ache, or a lifetime worth of pain
Baby, please come with me
Just keep in mind that even roses have thorns

Hook

Stick
Diggin down your head in the sand
Trusting hope is really all you care to do

Hook x2

Feel free to post feedback what you think about the lyrics, the atmosphere of the song, the "general feeling". Do you think it's good?

[pompeyjazz]

 Nice song Adam. It works for me. You've got a great voice, plenty of passion and grit. Welcome to the forum mate. Enjoy it here

[The S]

Yup, really like your voice and your singing style. Good song too and the overall vibe is right up my alley.

Personally, I would've taken out, or re-written a couple of lines that sounds a tad "swedish" to me, as in not authentic english, "Diggin down your head in the sand" to name one, but I guess since we're in the same boat here, I might be nit picking a bit. 

Good stuff and welcome!

Cheers,

Peter

[CaliaMoko]

Inspired lyrics. I really like the hook! Especially "a fair sized beard, an empty cradle and a raincoat gathering dust".

My other favorite line: "One moment's ache, or a lifetime worth of pain".

I agree with S about the "head in the sand" line. I recommend working on that a bit more. Maybe something like "Don't stick your head in the sand" or "Don't bury or your head in the sand" or "Sticking your head in the sand"....

[Viva La Stereo]

I love it. You've captured such a brilliant atmosphere here. I got a Willie Nelson vibe from your vocal too. And the lyrics are excellent. As CaliaMoko pointed out, "a fair sized beard, an empty cradle and a raincoat gathering dust" is a HECK of a lyric. If you only sang that line over and over again I'd still love the song, it's just that good.

[Lejonhjarta]

Oohh wow thanks guys!! Your comments really inspires me! Will get to work on the stick lyric.