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Feedback on Works in Progress / Re: Half a song - Loin De Mois
« Last post by cowparsleyman on Today at 12:39:29 PM »
I had a quick go at doing the piano outro on guitar, I'm not entirely convinced. Here is a short clip:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/10MMeEATYYCTtGYqdkqbqBTJQoKqlgaxO/view?usp=sharing

Feels a bit like too much of a break to me? Perhaps with some other instrumentation, or recording the guitar a bit brighter so its' tonally more similar to the piano. Hmm.

Hi The Shackles Meister

Thanks for trying...

Miles better...You are right it sounds to stark a cut off, but to my ears it's a more sonically interesting song, it does add a contrast, keep the piano going pan a bit left, retain the guitar fade it in and pan a bit right, add a double bass, then fade out the piano near the end, bring the guitar back to centre and a slow fade to black.

cpm


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Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Lights Go Down
« Last post by DaveDeMann on Today at 12:08:59 PM »
Quite likable.

but, in the world of lyrics (other than opera, and maybe folk) less is more.

Pretty likable song though
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Feedback on Works in Progress / Re: Half a song - Loin De Mois
« Last post by Ramshackles on Today at 12:03:25 PM »
I had a quick go at doing the piano outro on guitar, I'm not entirely convinced. Here is a short clip:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/10MMeEATYYCTtGYqdkqbqBTJQoKqlgaxO/view?usp=sharing

Feels a bit like too much of a break to me? Perhaps with some other instrumentation, or recording the guitar a bit brighter so its' tonally more similar to the piano. Hmm.
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Lyrically, pretty good, but music wise, sounds a bit like a theme tune for 80's sitcom.

i'd say try different singers, younger, female maybe, use of steel drums, strong base.

I'm not saying to go the obvious road of full reggae, but just a sprinkle, over a hip-hop arrangement might do it.

As I say, nice lyrics.

ETA, the title, nd hence the reggae reference, might be best changed. Something like Too Tight might do it.
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The Bar / Re: Forum break
« Last post by Bill Saunders on Today at 11:09:07 AM »
Paul, I send you my best wishes. You've been very supportive of my music, and you are a really talented guy. I hope you are back soon.

Take care
Bill
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Competitions / Re: January Song of the Month - WINNERS!
« Last post by cowparsleyman on Today at 10:48:15 AM »
By Golly!
I admit I was sort of keen to seen how this would turn out, I was very surprised with the results.
I'm usually super happy a song of pleases anyone, and this one pleases more than a few.

I thought Skub would win, all entries are very good but Jodie really did it for me.

Well thanks for showing appreciation  ;D, I can put it to good use.

Congratluations Rightly, a worthy winner.

cpm
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Lyrics / Schooldays
« Last post by Katie Wilson on Today at 10:17:28 AM »
I think everybody looks back at their schooldays in some way or another, happy or sad - I wrote this picturing someone sitting on a stool playing acoustic guitar , strumming in a nostalgic way, regretful way - wishing things were different
and just in a car as I drive past my old school thirty years after I left


Schooldays

Drove past the school of my youth
Just the other day
the one where all my dreams started

drove past the school of my youth
just the other day
the one where it all started to go wrong

some of the teachers that were then
are still in the same classrooms now

I didn't look right , I didn't look left
I just kept my eyes on the road

I was a bad boy at school
I was a bad boy at school
I broke all the rules that they had

whether you liked or hated , your- school days
some memories leave you feeling sad

Drove past the school of my youth
Just the other day
the one where all my dreams started

so many years, so many tears
don't let your dreams hold you back

I was a bad boy at school
I was a bad boy at school
I broke all the rules that they had

the years may go by , but memories don't die
unlike the dreams from your school days

I was a bad boy at school
I was a bad boy at school

I broke all the rules and my dreams






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The Bar / Re: Song titles
« Last post by Katie Wilson on Today at 10:15:48 AM »
 Thanks Dave I now wait until,I've finished the lyrics and look for the stand out our catchiest words
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The Bar / Re: Forum break
« Last post by Katie Wilson on Today at 10:12:47 AM »
All the best I hope it won't be to long intil you are back with us

Katie xxx
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The Bar / Re: Forum break
« Last post by montydog on Today at 08:11:35 AM »
Sorry to hear that,Paul. My thoughts are with you and I hope your problems are resolved soon.

Best wishes

M
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