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Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Road 22
« Last post by LostBoy on Today at 07:50:22 PM »
Hi Maya, Congratulations on another cool song. This one is my fave I’ve heard of yours. The chorus is so catchy. Your production is fantastic! How lucky we are on this forum to have someone young and talented like you who has an actual chance to achieve her dreams! I’m sure I wouldn’t be out of line to say that we are all cheering you on! Go on girl!!!🤩🎶🎶👊🏻🎶🎶🥳
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Feedback on Finished songs / Re: August Rain
« Last post by jamesh on Today at 12:48:03 PM »
Hi

I agree with Man Made Material, this is a cracking song and your dusting off has really paid off (not that I know what the first version was like). It also sounds very current and could easily have been a track by one of those boy bands my daughter listens to! (Hope thats a compliment!)

James
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Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Ghosted
« Last post by man made material on Today at 11:49:00 AM »
@Paulski  @digger72  @IronKnee  thanks for the listen and positive feedback guys!🙏
@LostBoy  it’s amazing how one can listen to something so many times and not hear something until it’s pointed out to you and then it’s impossible to ignore, to the point where you can’t believe you didn’t notice it before… and after going and listening to this after reading your comment, all I could hear was hissing ssssnakes!😂 I’m baffled how I hadn’t heard it but once you pointed it out it was almost unlistenable!😂 anyway I’ve gone in and adjusted the eq and de-essed the vox a bit, also dropped the total vox level a bit (I think I previously had been burying the vocals a bit and had overcompensated on this track) and pumped the drums a smidge, updated as (mix 2)… really appreciate the comments!🙏👍
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Feedback on Finished songs / Re: August Rain
« Last post by man made material on Today at 11:32:27 AM »
@LostBoy  another absolutely top drawer vocal - just excellent , this has a brilliant soaring swooning melody too! Love it! ‘We’re a comet among stars’ what a line!
The production on this is brilliant too, however I reckon if you could make the chorus even BIGGER this would hit epic… I’d go with a bigger crash to announce the chorus ‘August’ … if you could get some wide BVs behind your ace lead vox in the chorus too (maybe another layer of synths too!😉) it’ll definitely become a hands in the air stadium tune, it already has that euphoric feel… another absolute cracker, don’t know why you’re down on it!👌👌👌
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Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Road 22
« Last post by Maya Clars on Today at 10:43:07 AM »
@digger72

Hello! :)

Ahh, thank you so so much! :))) I'm happy you like the sound of the vocal I got, I need to know :)

Thank you again! :)
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Lyrics / I'm Told God Don't Live Here No More
« Last post by Max66 on Today at 12:16:40 AM »
I'm thinking blues here  8)


I'm Told God Don't Live Here No More

I'm told God don't live here no more
He left a long long time ago
I'm told he had enough he said of us
Where he is now no one knows, for sure

I'm asking has he still got his army of angels
Is he now ruling some other world of innocents
Are they too fighting the same old same old wars
Has he not learn anything from us, at at all

I'm told God don't live here no more
He left a long long time ago
I'm told he had enough he said of us
Where he is now no one knows, for sure

Here they still butcher and kill in his name
Here they still fight the same old same old bad ass game
Kneel in the house of God hallelujah they still cry
Thousands of years the same old same, but now

I'm told God don't live here no more
He left a long long time ago
I'm told he had enough he said of us
Where he is now no one knows, for sure

But yeah the same old same old

Or so I'm been told
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Lyrics / Re: The Numbers (contains strong language & themes)
« Last post by Max66 on Yesterday at 11:51:37 PM »
My attempt at HipHop/rap  ;D

Chorus:
I'm undiscovered, send for Christopher Columbus!
He must be lost, somebody get that dude a compass
I threw a party for two, but didn't have the numbers
The numbers

My ego's smashed to bits
Like Blighty in the blitz
Hitler had a ball until those Nazis hit the skids
Winter come on through!
Toes be turning blue
Stalin did to them what Russian legends always do
Hit 'em where it hurt
Froze 'em in the dirt
Then painted the town red in a brand new “I Won The War” t-shirt
So different to today
How spoilt are these kids?
FaceTiming and TikToking as if that's all that there is
Let's talk mental health
Only gone one way, that's South
I guess we need to pay a shrink to come and stub it out
Can they sort me out too?
Got some shit to delve into
Troubled past, boring life, and a dick that never grew

Chorus:
I'm undiscovered, send for Christopher Columbus!
He must be lost, somebody get that dude a compass
I threw a party for two, but didn't have the numbers
The numbers

I'm a coiled spring
I'm a phone about to ring
I'm Whitney at her peak about to open her lips and sing
Untapped potential
And experimental
But if lockdown comes back I don't doubt I'm labelled non-essential
Queer like Freddie M
Not Freddie with a K
One has claws for hands, the other took it up the A
Such a weaker verse
Couldn't match the first
Yet another sequel, Marvel's bubble's bout to burst

Chorus:
I'm undiscovered, send for Christopher Columbus!
He must be lost, somebody get that dude a compass
I threw a party for two, but didn't have the numbers
The numbers

Chorus 2:
I'm lacking faith so like to give myself a roasting
How many people live their lives forever coasting?
I hope you found my words a tiny bit engrossing
Engrossing

First of all your attempt is really good but hey ''send''

I'm undiscovered, sent for Christopher Columbus!
He must be lost, somebody get that dude a compass
I threw a party for two, but didn't have the numbers
Those damn phone numbers

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Feedback on Finished songs / August Rain
« Last post by LostBoy on Yesterday at 10:32:15 PM »
Hi guys,

I’ve hit a bit of a songwriting slump lately, I have been trying to write my way through it…but in the meantime I have dug up this old song of mine that I always felt a bit…meh about…so I left it off of my “released” material…however, I always loved the opening lines “Stars hold your fire…save your luck for the wishful thinkers…we’ve got everything we need tonight.”😊🤷🏼‍♂️
…and soooo I decided to dust it off and try and save it from the grave I put it in! (Im feeling very dramatic tonight!😆🤦🏼‍♂️)…I’ve rearranged the music & changed a lot of lyrics…(it was set in California originally) 😆 truthfully I know it’s not a “single” kinda track, but I would put it on an album now at least, so there’s that!🥳🤪

All thoughts welcome and thank you for listening.😄🎶👊🏻🎶

https://soundcloud.com/leo-b-5/august-rain-master-fade

Lyrics
Stars hold your fire
Save your luck for the wishful thinkers
We’ve got everything we need tonight
This Ocean drive
Takes us right back to the start
After all these years have passed

I still remember the first time we met
When you cursed the sky
Cos your hair got wet

August Rain in Barcelona
As rare as the moment
Sparks were gonna fly
Under that broken sky
Yeah you thought I was only a plaything
A one night daydream
Now look where we are
We’re a comet among stars
The kind of love you see once in a lifetime
This love is a once in a lifetime
Whoa na na na na naaaa…

Those were the nights
Lost our friends on the streets of Gracia
Stole a kiss on that old fairground ride
We said goodbye, but it wasn’t long til I
Found my way back to your side

We were so young but just look where we are
Cos we’ve come so far
And it all started here under that…..

Chorus.

Bridge.
So let’s drink to the both of us…yeah
While others fade away
Our love stays the same
Stays the same

Who’d have thought that sparks could fly
Underneath that broken sky.



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Feedback on Finished songs / Re: My Dead Friend
« Last post by LostBoy on Yesterday at 10:09:27 PM »
Hey dude,  just wanted to say that I enjoyed my listens. I love the whole vibe. I’m glad you are working your way through the drought…I’m going through a similar phase. This came out great though man…I especially enjoyed the last chorus.🎶🎶👊🏻🎶🎶
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Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Ghosted
« Last post by LostBoy on Yesterday at 09:52:41 PM »
Hello mate,

I heard this a while ago and thought I’d commented already!🤦🏼‍♂️🤦🏼‍♂️😆

You absolutely nail the music! It really sounds great mate. 😄👍🏻

I have two suggestions in way of constructive feedback…

1. Your vocal is quite loud. I wasn’t sure if the drums needed to come up at first, but I think it’s just the vocal needs to sit better, cos listening on Apple pods, the vocal is too upfront to my ears.
2. Your chorus is cool lyrically, BUT there are a lot of “esses” going on in the middle “sssilenccce isss ssso loud” which unfortunately because of the way you repeat it and how you process your vocals…I’m sorry to say it sounds quite “slushy”…which of course isn’t ideal.

Anyway man, you know I’m a fan. I hope this helps!😄🎶👊🏻🎶
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