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Title: Ciggy break
Post by: jmacdon on August 30, 2014, 11:16:58 PM

I actually wrote this song (on my iPad) when I joined my colleague for a ciggy, at work.

We were in a weird caged-in conservatory (but with no glass) - and I just thought of being stuck here with nothing but a piano - and this song emerged.  Enjoy.

https://soundcloud.com/hitfactoryuk/ciggy1

Title: Re: Ciggy break
Post by: hardtwistmusic on August 31, 2014, 09:45:37 AM

To my ears, it was beautiful.  My mind would never have gone to "a peaceful cigarette break" while listening.  I "heard" a little more drama than that, but that's just what it evokes in my mind. 

This would be difficult to shoehorn a lyric onto.... but I think it could be done and might be good.  Some things that are "take a lyric with difficulty" work really well when you finally find it. 

If you ever want a lyric for an instrumental, let me know.