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Title: New DEMO-Diogenes-PLZ comment
Post by: fabber on May 26, 2013, 05:17:38 PM
Hey guy,

please give me some feedback on my new song Diogenes

https://soundcloud.com/shivering-sand/diogenes

Diogenes


step down from your cloud and light my way once more
are those hindrance? or are those signs i cant read?
pictures of read shadows are tricking my eyes?
does it really matter what you see when you are blind inside?

im falling through blue windows i...
fetch me up on the other side
what if?what if? oh nevermind
could i?could I? nono step aside!

well, whos the one in charge? is this freedom? maybe i went to far...
stitches of red needles are sewing my eyes
does it really matter what you see when you are blind inside?

im falling through blue windows i
fetch me up on the other side

oh look its there oh no just a trap?
oh mind if i? nono step aside.
Title: Re: New DEMO-Diogenes-PLZ comment
Post by: Neil C on May 27, 2013, 03:49:10 PM
Nice guitar and tune, and you've got a distinctive voice.
Sounds like a live recording - I'd be inclined to make the guitar a little louder in the miix. 
Not really sure what the lyrics are about but you sing them with real conviction :)
Neil
 
Title: Re: New DEMO-Diogenes-PLZ comment
Post by: fabber on May 31, 2013, 08:32:37 PM
Nice guitar and tune, and you've got a distinctive voice.
Sounds like a live recording - I'd be inclined to make the guitar a little louder in the miix. 
Not really sure what the lyrics are about but you sing them with real conviction :)
Neil
 
Hi,

thanks for Your comment. Yes it actually is a live record.