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Songwriter Forum => Competitions => Topic started by: nooms on March 31, 2012, 01:29:09 AM
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hi folks, here is my entry for the short song comp, try and stay awake..
http://soundcloud.com/nooms-1/yours-truly/s-LK5Wf
yours truly
theres a thorn in your side and i think i know who,
try hard to shift but you never can do
sometimes its an itch, sometimes its an ache,
but i suspect that its really yours truly
oh your mighty fine,
your mighty fine,
you can be my conspirator
in this funny old world you need an excuse
and i think you can call it yours truly
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On my third listen already ;D
You are a genius mate haha
You blow me away every time :)
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great!
gr. Dan
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Love the feel of this, especially when the harmonies come in. Nicely done 8)
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Hiya nooms,
This is quite beautiful. It's a strong entry for the short song competition.
Well done!
Paul
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Wow!! A great entry. This is brilliant. Seconded on the listens, i had to repeat a few times! The lyrics are beautiful and I love the way you sing them, full of emotion. Excellent stuff!
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this is a whole different type of biscuit nooms!
your songs never develop the normal way or the way i hear them...you always go of somehwere different
its a lovely song .... your vocals always do things to me....i love the sleepiness
tremendous short song ....its a great munch......i ll have a packet! :)
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Hey nooms!
Cracking little tune you got there :) i listened a whole bunch of times because as you know i love vocal harmonies.. and man you do them so well. when they first came in they were good, but that last little verse was great!
I also really like your voice and vocal delivery, its not trying to be something its not, if you know what i mean. It sounds powerful without sounding strained.
The only negative i could say for this would be that the vocals in the beginning sounded a bit too loud compared to the music.. But hey, its probably just my speakers, sounded fine in headphones:)
Well done nooms!
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Yep Dankepig is right about that last part.
The way this builds is really fantastic. Small to big, stop. Brilliant ;D
And those harmonies are great!
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Wow bang on 1.30 ;D
I fecking love this Nooms - best vocal I have heard from you , nice backing vocals as well
First time I have heard guitar from you - you are some player ;D
Brilliant chord changes as well
Man I just love this ;D
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thanks people
paul, gary, cheff, mwrabbit, domj..
i was cautious in putting it up as thought it might be bit low key compared to the opposition..so thankyou
schavlee, dont you ever sleep ? thankyou for your fab comments, your a diamond geezer john
i wish that was true kaf, im a dodgy player really, held together with string .. but as long as it doesnt notice, i wont say a word Pike..
tinam
this week it was date & apricot malted loaf, toasted...superb
thanks all for the comments
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The tune is very sleepy and didn't particularly grab me. But the vocal, harmonies and lyrics are all very lovely. So a thumbs up over all :-)
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everything they said with jam on top .
are you going to do a full length version , that would be great ;D
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I'm sorry to admit this... but I'm a little lost in translation, what is this song about? About being there for someone, or about taking the blame for the loved one problems?