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Title: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: nooms on March 31, 2012, 01:29:09 AM

hi folks, here is my entry for the short song comp, try and stay awake..

http://soundcloud.com/nooms-1/yours-truly/s-LK5Wf

yours truly

theres a thorn in your side and i think i know who,
try hard to shift but you never can do
sometimes its an itch, sometimes its an ache,
but i suspect that its really yours truly

oh your mighty fine,
your mighty fine,
you can be my conspirator

in this funny old world you need an excuse
and i think you can call it yours truly
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: Schavuitje on March 31, 2012, 01:38:04 AM
On my third listen already  ;D
You are a genius mate haha 
You blow me away every time :)
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: cheff daniel on March 31, 2012, 08:52:37 AM
great!

gr.   Dan
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: domj on March 31, 2012, 10:07:33 AM
Love the feel of this, especially when the harmonies come in. Nicely done  8)
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: Paul on March 31, 2012, 10:49:52 AM
Hiya nooms,

This is quite beautiful.  It's a strong entry for the short song competition.

Well done!

Paul
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: misswhiterabbit on March 31, 2012, 11:39:25 AM
Wow!! A great entry. This is brilliant. Seconded on the listens, i had to repeat a few times! The lyrics are beautiful and I love the way you sing them, full of emotion. Excellent stuff!
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: tina m on March 31, 2012, 01:51:21 PM
 this is a whole different type of biscuit nooms!
your songs never develop the normal way or the way i hear them...you always go of somehwere different

 its a lovely song .... your vocals always do things to me....i love the sleepiness
tremendous short song ....its a great  munch......i ll have a packet! :)
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: dankepig on March 31, 2012, 02:13:54 PM
Hey nooms!
Cracking little tune you got there :) i listened a whole bunch of times because as you know i love vocal harmonies.. and man you do them so well. when they first came in they were good, but that last little verse was great!
I also really like your voice and vocal delivery, its not trying to be something its not, if you know what i mean. It sounds powerful without sounding strained.

The only negative i could say for this would be that the vocals in the beginning sounded a bit too loud compared to the music.. But hey, its probably just my speakers, sounded fine in headphones:)

Well done nooms!
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: Schavuitje on March 31, 2012, 03:58:54 PM
Yep Dankepig is right about that last part.
The way this builds is really fantastic. Small to big, stop. Brilliant  ;D
And those harmonies are great!
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: Kafla on March 31, 2012, 05:32:35 PM
Wow bang on 1.30 ;D

I fecking love this Nooms - best vocal I have heard from you , nice backing vocals as well

First time I have heard guitar from you - you are some player ;D

Brilliant chord changes as well

Man I just love this  ;D
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: nooms on April 01, 2012, 02:37:40 PM

thanks people
paul, gary, cheff, mwrabbit, domj..
i was cautious in putting it up as thought it might be bit low key compared to the opposition..so  thankyou

schavlee, dont you ever sleep ? thankyou for your fab comments, your a diamond geezer john

i wish that was true kaf, im a dodgy player really,  held together with string .. but as long as it doesnt notice, i wont say a word Pike..

tinam
this week it was date & apricot malted loaf, toasted...superb

thanks all for the comments
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: James Nighthawk on April 01, 2012, 09:39:51 PM
The tune is very sleepy and didn't particularly grab me. But the vocal, harmonies and lyrics are all very lovely. So a thumbs up over all :-)
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: andy5544 on April 02, 2012, 12:06:35 AM
everything they said with jam on top .
are you going to do a full length version , that would be great  ;D
Title: Re: Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly
Post by: Arturo Boyero on April 02, 2012, 07:18:12 PM
I'm sorry to admit this... but I'm a little lost in translation, what is this song about? About being there for someone, or about taking the blame for the loved one problems?