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Title: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: cheff daniel on March 21, 2012, 12:59:47 PM
this is one of my older songs, recorded this morning. just plain guitar and vocal. there's a little hiss and a false note on the guitar track but so be it.


http://soundcloud.com/cheff-daniel/01-steps-and-moves


gr.   Dan
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: tina m on March 21, 2012, 03:48:24 PM
this certainly fits the bill  dan/cheff ....should i be calling you dan becos ive been calling you cheff?
it totaly works as a complete song in just 1.14mins  which is very impressive & doesnt sound like its cut short or should go on longer
i love your big cuddly voice as usual......yes very impressive & probaly hard to beat!  :(
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: domj on March 21, 2012, 03:56:03 PM
Got to concur with Tinam here. 1:14 and a complete sounding song! Brilliant.... and i've just chucked my first idea in the bin after hearing that, all of a sudden it sounds very crap.  :(
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: Paul on March 21, 2012, 05:48:46 PM
Hi Dan,

Your voice has great character and it is lovely to hear your songwriting skills shine through with a basic arrangement of guitar and vocal.  Neat fingerpicking and emotional vocal. Well done with this one.

Paul
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: jim morrison on March 21, 2012, 05:49:39 PM
Another great one Dan, i can almost feel some pain from that vibe, hopefully i'm mistaken
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: Dutchbeat on March 21, 2012, 06:29:37 PM
yes, your vocal is so damn you, extremely good

could i ask you, Cheff Dan, one day to sing a few lines to one of my crappy songs
please, even though i know my music is totally not your music

but i would love to have you sing a bridge in one of my poor uptempo synthesizer songs, i hope you are prepared to do that

anyway i loved this short song, as always and sounds like a natural very short song
i loved your singing the best of it

i am going to look at my short song collection now, i have one or two in my files

but thanks for sharing this, Dan
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: Songsmith on March 22, 2012, 12:17:28 AM
Jesus s*** Dan,

Love this, brilliant, What a beautiful song brilliantly played & sung, tremendous lyric, just pure quality mate  :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: Schavuitje on March 22, 2012, 01:21:18 AM
Really good mate and like everyone says it's a complete song :)

And it's a good song! Your vocals are ace :)
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: Ramshackles on March 22, 2012, 07:55:55 AM
Enjoyed the lyric to this...as ever, your voice suits it totally and it's definitely your style :)
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: gerrybhoy on March 22, 2012, 09:23:06 AM
Short, sweet and complete, enjoyed very much.
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: bewarethisboy on March 22, 2012, 10:00:58 AM
love it, rich tones, great vocal and lyric - complete. Love it. BTB
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: cheff daniel on March 22, 2012, 10:59:39 AM
thanks everyone. dutchbeat, thats to much honour, songsmith i will think about your pm thanks for the offer.



gr.  Dan
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: James Nighthawk on March 22, 2012, 01:29:27 PM
Short, sweet, very warm and endearingly human vocal.

I wanted it to keep going with a string section coming in! Always a good sign

Only criticism is that the chord choice is a bit well-trodden. But this is more about the vocal and vibe anyway

Ace!
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: Kafla on March 22, 2012, 05:38:47 PM
You really are the man - you have a voice that would melt an iceberg Dan

And you work really hard to pull the lyrics and production together

But this is one I think deserves a longer production  ;D
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: cheff daniel on March 23, 2012, 10:59:41 AM
thanks james and andrew. i thought about the strings and a basic standup bass, but decided to keep it like it is. andy i think that everything has been said, making it longer would only be a repetition of parts.
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: domj on March 23, 2012, 11:42:24 AM
How did you record the guitar on this Dan?
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: cheff daniel on March 23, 2012, 11:56:44 AM
this is my little 12 fret parlor guitar, stringed with elixer nanoweb 0.12 tuned a half step down for better resonation. i use one tube condenser mike at 20 cm pointed somewhere between the 12th fret and the soundhole on the trebleside of the guitar. this guitar have a round sound from its self, other guitars like a dread or OM would sound more crisp.


gr.   Dan
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: domj on March 23, 2012, 12:02:40 PM
Sounds so nice, a real woody deep sound.
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: estreet on March 23, 2012, 12:47:59 PM
Love it Dan. Perfect.
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: cheff daniel on March 23, 2012, 01:15:04 PM
thank you. i've been playing around a lot with this stuff just to get that sound right. sometimes i use a second mike at the bridge for more detail, but i like the one close mike best.



gr.   Dan
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: stickboymusic on March 23, 2012, 09:52:14 PM
This is really nice

Only thing that stood out to me (because i used to do it!) you say "fings" and not "things"

Probably not a problem...i know i just spent a lot of time amking sure i didnt do it when singing as it felt so natural to me but always got picked out by people
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: cheff daniel on March 24, 2012, 09:07:08 AM
haha, the funny fing is that the word is not in the song. but you're right i do that. how do you know that?


gr.  Dan
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: stickboymusic on March 24, 2012, 09:45:02 AM
haha, the funny fing is that the word is not in the song. but you're right i do that. how do you know that?


gr.  Dan

Oh goodness!! I was listening to a load of peoples work on here..... i seem to have written this comment about a song that wasnt actually yours!!

Sorry about that - this song is excellent
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: cheff daniel on March 24, 2012, 03:04:29 PM
no problem at all, thanks for the comment.



gr.   Dan
Title: Re: short song competition entry / steps and moves
Post by: Arturo Boyero on April 02, 2012, 06:35:58 PM
oh, this is lovely! Nice work!