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Title: No sky, No blue
Post by: ShAaShAy on March 05, 2012, 03:45:13 PM
some quickly written lyrics once more.
this time i just let my fingers do what they wanted to, it just came out this way.
hope they're good enough for you guys! :D


those glistening eyes, they can hurt
that killer smile, it can really leave a mark
your tempting lips, make me go wild
everything bout you swivels my heart


i may be that one person who you may not deserve
but for me you're that spark which ignites my desires
but like they say, you shouldn't play with fire

the world keeps spinning and rain keeps pouring
everything is exactly where it's meant to be
but then why aren't you east where my sun rises
you seem like the west where my sunlight always seizes


what stings deep is that one thing
the same thing which makes me think
if you were meant to go away one day
why were you always the song i used to sing?


sometimes it's better to let something go and wait
maybe it'll come back someday and never go away
but why that suffocation of letting go always stay

the world keeps spinning and rain keeps pouring
everything is exactly where it's meant to be
but then why aren't you east where my sun rises
you seem like the west where my sunlight always seizes


how easy it is to just pretend as if
the sky you looked up to would forever be blue
no one realizes how much you really grieve
when you look up and there's no heaven
there's no blue, the fact that
nothing you ever said was ever true








Title: Re: No sky, No blue
Post by: laurabh on March 05, 2012, 10:26:09 PM
I like how all your lyrics are really detailed, you can see a clear story in all of your songs. Oh, amd sorry I haven't got back to you, been busy lately, I'll message you :)
Title: Re: No sky, No blue
Post by: ShAaShAy on March 06, 2012, 04:26:00 AM
Thanks a ton Laura! :D
Yeah I saw your message.. :)
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Post by: Sellon on March 07, 2012, 06:15:56 AM
it's good, but...you always write the same thing in a different way, try writing about something else maybe, you might get your own style, you never know, I mean i see stuff like this a lot...i dunno but, however, the last paragraph is pretty damn good I like that part the most.