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Title: Sun - more of a poem
Post by: Dave Smith94 on February 28, 2012, 05:26:11 PM

Where has spring gone,
Has winter been prolonged?

Ive been talking to the sun,

He says he hates when morning comes,

I asked why do we get the blame,

He said evryone needs a name to shame,

I asked him why no one cares,

He said you dont believe in theirs,

I asked him which way to turn,

He said look up and you will learn.

Title: Re: Sun - more of a poem
Post by: lightspeed182 on February 28, 2012, 05:37:29 PM

 nice words , very visual

Title: Re: Sun - more of a poem
Post by: Dave Smith94 on February 28, 2012, 05:45:37 PM

thanks pal, wrote it a couple of years ago

Title: Re: Sun - more of a poem
Post by: lightspeed182 on February 28, 2012, 06:15:57 PM

  yeah, i think it stands well as a poem on its own and if you want to put music to it,
  nice one