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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: pompeyjazz on August 02, 2022, 06:17:56 PM
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Hi all, seems a little quiet around these parts recently - I guess it's the holiday season - I've been away myself. Will be catching up with some reviews over the next few days as I guess I've missed out on some fabulous songs.
In the mean time, here's a little number that I recently put together about social media influencers. Enjoy the listen :)
All pumped up like candy floss
Turkey teeth and tight crop top
Tik tok tipped to reach the top
At least until the bubble pops
Virtual dreams are in a cloud
Yes, they hear you very loud
You can't stop, just can't stop
Candyfloss, candyfloss
Influencing teenage girls
Good intentions in a whirl
Beauty products to promote
Disappear in a puff of smoke
Oh you get your kicks on clicks
That is how this new world ticks
You can't stop, just can't stop
Candyfloss, candyfloss
Didn't anybody ever say to you
That to get your pleasure there must be some pain
But the pain's not there as you are purely virtual
And that's the way it's going to remain
Break
Virtual dreams are in a cloud
Yes, they hear you very loud
You can't stop, just can't stop
Candyfloss, candyfloss
All pumped up like candy floss
Turkey teeth and tight crop top
Tik tok tipped to reach the top
At least until the bubble pops
Virtual dreams are in a cloud
Yes, they hear you very loud
You can't stop, just can't stop
Candyfloss, candyfloss
(c) Bradley - 2022
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Hi
I like it , Its Fresh ,Witty & True
well done
subvibe
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I really liked this. Has a strong Elvis Costello vibe (well... to my ear). And it's all so true!
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Very original song John with clever lyrics, the style of the instrumentation suites the lyrics well...
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Sweet John... liked it... got a kind of modern soul feel to it, that works a treat. Delicious sax solo in the middle, and the details like that cymbal roll right at the end are spot on. The lyrics made me smile too. I suppose social media is the new rock and roll for recent generations. (BTW What are turkey teeth? Are they like hen's teeth, i.e. something very rare?)
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Turkey teeth, so called as it's a procedure that you can have in Turkey where they file down your original teeth and cap them with shiny white plastic ones, NICE !!!
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) thanks for explaining that... I think... although it has sort of made my knees turn to jelly... I don't think I'll be booking that any time soon. :-0
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Hola @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Cool song and cool colors. Lyrics are great here, true virtual reality.
Ver nice listening-
Stay well
Mora
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Yo pomps.
Incisive commentary on the influencer bollix. Man that stuff is beyond ridiculous,I don't know who's the dafter,those 'influencing' or the muppets sucking it all up.
Super song as ever John. I thought you sang 'Tik Tok tits. ;D Works for me either way.
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Very retro @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269), this is 50's meet 80’s. I could imagine ABC presenting this song. Highlights are the backing vocals and guitar stabs. If you could lift the chorus to rise above the other sections then forward it on to Martin Fry and Trevor Horn to further work their magic, that would be a treat!
Consistently good work John!
Wicked
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Great stuff John 8)
Loving the progression in the chorus….the breakout m8 is also really clever 😍
It’s a shoulder tapper - if you know what I mean lol
I am always astounded by your output - both in its diversity and in its quality.
Andy
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I've been away on hols too! Elvis Costello has already been mentioned and I can certainly hear that. There's some interesting rhythmic shifts going on here which I really like. Great e piano and bass. What am I saying? It's all good. Oh, and you beat me to 'Turkey Teeth'..I was going to use that somewhere!! Great track :)
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"Tik tok tipped to reach the top" - I love lines like that! I also love changes in tempo (so hard to pull off).
Effortless delivery and great topical lyrics. Some of my clients are in the influencer business so I'll remain silent on that!
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Love the change of tempo. Great variety in this song!!