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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: ProfessorFalken on July 26, 2022, 04:18:48 PM
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I actually wasnt ever going to post this track cos its so ancient, but Im still working on new stuff. Ive got 4 or 5 tracks where the music is all done - just need to come up with some words and a vocal melody - this is how ive always worked.
Anyway, this is a shameless piece of 80s synthpop - the thing about 80s synthpop is a lot of it sounds very cheesy and dated now - but i think the very best of the genre are great and sound very classy - so thats what im attempting to emulate. Yet again for me this is a tale of unrequited love.
Now the eagle eared amongst you might notice a very slight clanger of a duff note on the synth guitar - see if you can spot it! Enjoy!
Tomorrow
Oooh, you got me on tenterhooks,
Giving me strange looks,
I not sure why anymore.
And you - you know how to play the game,
And I - I dont want to take the blame.
Waiting for you to make your move,
Waiting for me to make mine oh no.
Chorus
I cant help the way I'm feeling,
I watched your face to find the meaning,
I hope and pray,
There must be a reason,
The sun wont shine in a different season.
oooh, youve got me crawling walls,
And Ive been taking falls,
I'm not sure why anymore.
And I hope and I pray,
And I hope and I pray,
That I will find a way,
To find words I should say.
Waiting for me to make my move,
Waiting for you to make yours - oh no.
Chorus
Dont wanna make a fool of myself - oh no,
I find that so easy to do.
Chorus X 2
Theres always tomorrow - oh yeah
Theres always tomorrow.
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Hola @ProfessorFalken (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22907)
I enjoyed the atmosphere of your song, the arrangement and rhythm are very catchy and lyrics fit well here.
Stay well
Mora
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Yeah, everything you mention happens in the track, a good emulation mate! the vocal was a bit on the boxy side but maybe that was intentional...
best!
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Hey Prof, nice stuff. Yes, I think you've definitely avoided the cheesy end of synth pop here... this is more towards the 'cool indie' end of the synth pop spectrum... a bit like New Order maybe? In fact your voice and vocal delivery is not a million miles from Bernard Sumner in this... especially your kind of staccato delivery in the chorus. Production is maybe a little muggy but that'd be easy to fix if you could get access to a better way to record the vocals. Another impressive piece; I like the way you wear your influences with pride but always bring something new to them.
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80's music meant little me to me at the time being a rock n roll soul from the late 60's/70's. The further away we get from stereotyping music into one bag or another, I've come to really appreciate this kind of stuff. This is a great song and I really enjoyed it. Well crafted and well produced. Brilliant :)
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As someone said,it`s New Order-ish,especially in the vocal. Yeah,they`re the `cool` end of synth-pop,but that`s pretty hard to pull off.