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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: SlavaB on July 18, 2022, 10:17:18 PM
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Hi Folks,
Wrote fairly pedantic track with lot of sarcasm as usual. Fredbacks highly appreciated :o 8)
Regards 🤟👁️
Lyrics :
Verse 1
I have met him only once
He never smile and never speaks
He even never ever farts
As this how accurate he is
Ironed trousers, shiny shoes
Like mum of his would like to see
Softy skins, with eaten nails
Believe how accurate he is
A A Accurate x3
How accurate he is
Verse 2
Smelling fresh, with gel on top
He walk through street to seek attention
He purely acting like peacock
As this how accurate he is
Once i asked him whats the time?
He rolled his eyes like my wife
What a picture i have got..
Believe How accurate he is!
Chorus
He looking very nice
He smell is also great
And the way he walks
His steps leave holy marks in place
He releases sins
He can bless me
He can bless you too
But not with that mustache he has
Verse 3
I never seen pedant again
His smells has gone just right away
Impression left, along with sins
As this how accurate his is
Walking advert just has gone
Boutique, perfume, even beatuician
I know they all would wanting him
Believe how accurate he is
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Where is it?
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Where is it?
My apologies, has been rectified now 🙌🙏😁
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Hola @SlavaB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19895)
It's a great song, very well produced and the mix is great, it has strength and rhythm. I liked it a lot, it's also catchy, modern and very funny. I think it has it all. Good work
Stay well
Mora
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Oh this is fun! Great beat and mischeivious lyrics. Love it.
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Great to hear another one from you @SlavaB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19895) It's got a funky ska punk feel to it and also reminds me of a great band I went to see quite a few years ago. Gogol Bordello. This is a whole heap of fun and really enjoyed the listen
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funky tune, some funny lyrics which are great, it may just be my speakers but the symbol clashes sounded very loud and little over powering so maybe tone them down a little.
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Yo Slava.
I always love your bass work.
A very entertaining song with a dash of humour to season.
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Haha, love it. You know you are one of my forum heroes... always love the weird lyrics and your unique style. Bass here is funkier than most of your stuff too, and the electric guitar far less prominent than usual, so it has quite a different feel, but a good one. Yeah, it is that cheeky bassline that carries the whole thing. And bonus points for the no-nonsense ending!
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Aww...the brass!! Lovely! This is fun, but it's also really well performed. I think this track is absolutely first class. I really enjoyed it. Well done :)
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Cool performance! The melody is energizing, cheerful ironic lyrics.
Creative and well delivered.
Maya