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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: pompeyjazz on May 26, 2022, 03:16:08 PM
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Hi All, Here's a new one for me that I wrote this week. I've gone a bit retro in a 3/4 timing on this one. I wrote it about one of my dogs, she's getting on a bit these days and slowing down a bit, but not enough to want 4 walks a day. It's very therapeutic getting out and about walking and I was just thinking of all the stuff we have experienced over the years. Anyway, a bit nostalgic but that's how the song turned out. Hope that you enjoy the listen, John
V1
Oh I'll never forget that day
When you came home to stay
Been with me now for all these years
We've loved together and we've shed some tears
And always, you're there for me
Looking into my eyes
Ch
I'll be walking Lily in the rain
Hoping that the sun's going to shine again
In my mind, I'll always be
With Lily in the rain
V2
We've travelled oh so long
You helped me carry on
And any time I need a friend
I look at you and you're always there
And even in the darkest times
You make me feel alive
Ch
I'll be walking Lily in the rain
Hoping that the sun's going to shine again
In my mind, I'll always be
With Lily in the rain
M8
I'll never forget that night
With you sitting there by my side
We waited 'till the morning light
Then drifted away
Ch
I'll be walking Lily in the rain
Hoping that the sun's going to shine again
In my mind, I'll always be
With Lily in the rain
My Lily in the rain
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Hey John. I'm always so impressed with your production. This sounds so pro.
It's a really lovely sentiment. It's strange that I've actually been considering a song about our family dog who is also getting on a bit. They really are awesome aren't they?
I thought this was lovely. "I'll be walking Lily in the rain
Hoping that the sun's going to shine again."
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The mood of the song is perfectly described by the words "I'll be walking Lily in the rain" While listening to this music, I'm imagining exactly this picture.
Played it several times. I like the slight accent on the unstressed beat. Beautiful blues.
Maya
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Thanks so much @Jack Simmons (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18691) and @Maya Clars (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22624) That's Lily in the picture doing what she usually does in the rain :) Dogs are wonderful
I think it's that unconditional love that melts your heart. Thank you for the compliments and the listens :)
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Hola @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
I have listened to the whole song enjoying it. I really like the tempo you have chosen for this style of song, very successful. I liked everything here, the guitars sound great, the color in general is so authentic from a sweeter and more relaxed era... Very good, very good
Stay wellll
Mora
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Hi John, some lovely chords and chord structures in there. Drums sounded fab, what did you do differently for them? Nice overall production and the backing vox sounded great. Lovely melody, good work mate!
Jamie
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Cheers @Jamie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19125). I used the "Modern Vintage" kit on Ez drummer for this one. I usually use the Prog Rock kit as it has a lot of balls but this one needed a different kit for the vintage vibe
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John, this is lovely! It’s such a sweet song - melody is beautiful! And imagery is great. If you hadn’t told us Lily was a dog, I would never have guessed (well, maybe ‘walking Lily… might have given it away but…🙂)
Anyhoo, beautifully done…. Again … @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
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Hey Pomps, this really made me smile. The first verse sets you up to think it is a love song about a human partner... then the word 'walking' gives it away in the chorus that it is about a dog... which is a lovely twist, and kind of serves to show how genuine the relationship between people and animals can be (Why shouldn't there be love songs about animals? I can't think of many but there should be!) 3/4 timing felt great for it... I can imagine you and Lily waltzing along Portsmouth sea front to it. And the 'rain' gives it that perfect happy/melancholy balance that I think is so important to great songs... a bit of salt in the sugar and vice versa. Another lovely Sunday morning track. I'm loving the forum this morning... it's like a warm bath for the soul...
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) - I concur with @Jack Simmons (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18691) - really great production. The song's very catchy too.
Nice to have the time to listen again..
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Super song, I can hear Jos Stone singing this mate...
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You know I'm going to mention Café Bleu again don't you?!
Some lovely chord changes here. Just a very well chosen atmosphere and clear production.
We've never met but I feel I know you well from all your songs - which goes to show how honest and relatable they are (not to say prolific).
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Very robustly sweet and melancholic, a bit like your ‘Sat on the Ledge One’ in that you create a very evocative mood with very soulful vocals and lots of dips in and out of minor chords. A really lovely song about an animal. I wouldn’t have put my sheep one up if I’d have seen this first. So I came second already in Animal Song of the Month! ;)
I liked the separation of the instruments with a bit of subtle panning - everything stood out so well. Very nice John, cheers!
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I thought I'd posted my thoughts the other day (but I was drunk so probably forgot to post it!).
This taks me back to the 50s (or at least it would if I was that old! :D ). Nice one.
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Well, this is certainly my style of music...love those triplets. Living in my childhood for three and a half minutes....{swaying to the music}...yeah...I'm old and this style is so familiar to me.
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Just Fantastic John! Perfect tempo that swings just right. The groove grabs you
in , but its your vocal that stands out to me the most on this! Great job on pitch
and delivery, really enjoy this song!
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
John, great nostalgic track. Great title and I’ve met too, although it wasn’t raining when we did walking the dog..
Double Fantasy-esque. The verses are really spot on and your vocals distinctive, heartfelt and just the right touch of Lennon.
Great work
:-)
Neil
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I just wanted to say a very big thank you for all of your reviews and listens on this latest song. As always they are very much appreciated :)
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Yo pomps.
What a lovely old 60s feel to this one,but with a sound they could only dream about back then. Mighty.
With Michael coming on to a sheep and you writing love songs for your pooch,I'm beginning to wonder what's coming next. Durty Broots the lot of ye. :P
Great work as ever John.
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Lovely sound and feel to this.
You have so many strings to your bow…and have the ability to either tear the place apart or lovingly put it all back together again.
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A beautiful set of chords to begin this composition. Cool drumming and a delightful melody. Man's best friend immortalised in song. A chorus of such eloquent beauty. it's the equivalent of 'Me and Mrs Jones' but an ode to your faithful buddy!
Wicked