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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: Parry1078 on May 07, 2022, 06:47:36 PM
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Verse:
When the black comes knocking at your door
It's always looking for more
Intolerance of the topic
Defending within your means
Pre chorus:
This day you die...
Chorus:
I'm okay I'm alright
A common way of life
It's never right to fight for your sanity
Verse:
The falcon raises its head again
Your sense of self Is crucial
Your nightmare rears more and more
Judgement day in 1997 no feeling
Pre chorus:
This day you die...
Chrous:
I'm okay I'm alright
A common way of life
It's never right to fight for your sanity
Bridge:
Blinded by me, you can't see the wagon
Three is the number of the lion.
An immoral roach nestled somewhere in time
No warnings, no signs
Now it's time to write some lines
Na na na na freeze in time, die
Na na na na freeze in time, die
Ending:
Is it the end, my friend?
Master you're going 'round the bend
The end!
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Please review?
Thank you in advance!
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Hey Parry1078, welcome to the forum. It wouldn't be a bad idea to dive in and review a few other people's songs and I'm sure you'll then get some reciprocation. Do you have any music for this one, or is it just lyrics thus far?
Cheers
Derek
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Hi,
No worries, I've just got the lyrics so far to be honest!