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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: SlavaB on January 11, 2022, 09:22:37 PM
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Hey folks,
thought to out a bit of smile on your faces. Please do let me know if you smile at least once throughout the track 😉
Lyrics :
Situation has arised, miscommunication and misunderstanding took place
Verse 1
Ive been told there is new rules
I must wear mask in public
So i took one from my shelf
Carnival mask i always had
Time has come to leave my house
Had to fill my car with fuel
So i took my mask with me
Guess what happens next to me...
Dont blame my attitude
Inconveniently i took it wrong
Chorus
What the Fart was that
What a Farting prick
Verse 2
Ive been told there is new rules
I must use a sanitizer on the entry to the shop
I smashed the button down
Liquid shot in people eyes
Got my trousers also wet
What an inconvenient, and interesting day
Maybe i should stay at home
To isolate myself away
The only downside i have got
I forgot my keys at home
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Hola @SlavaB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19895)
I really like your lyrics, very hooligan and rebellious but you haven't put the link to Soundcloud, at least it gives me an error and I haven't been able to listen to the track ... Check it out ...
Stay well
Mora
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Hola @SlavaB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19895)
I really like your lyrics, very hooligan and rebellious but you haven't put the link to Soundcloud, at least it gives me an error and I haven't been able to listen to the track ... Check it out ...
Stay well
Mora
Hi Mora,
Thank you so much for pointing into the issue, i have changed the link now so its all should sing and dance within a click. I hope to see you smiling when you going to listen it 😉😇
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Hola @SlavaB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19895)
I really like your lyrics, very hooligan and rebellious but you haven't put the link to Soundcloud, at least it gives me an error and I haven't been able to listen to the track ... Check it out ...
Stay well
Mora
Hi Mora,
Thank you so much for pointing into the issue, i have changed the link now so its all should sing and dance within a click. I hope to see you smiling when you going to listen it 😉😇
I really liked the track, very entertaining, it could be used for a movie about the virus ...
I like the lyrics, it is acid but full of humor.
I love this line
"So i took one from my shelf
Carnival mask i always had"
Stay well
Mora
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Smile accomplished. :)
Lots of fun Slava - a bit less heavy for you, and a bit more "ska" with those horns and the reggae-like beat.
I especially like the scatting "vocal solo" towards the end - ba-ba-boom etc - loved that. ;D
Great to hear you enjoying yourself and cheering us all up too.
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lol
AAAaah that is fun
a bit looser than Rammstein
top lyrics
an easy listen after the first line
i enjoyed that
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The song sounded very unexpectedly from the first seconds :) and then a breathtaking growling bass sounded! Ha-ha :)
You are a real artist! The lyrics are amazing!
Maya
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Ha.
SlavaB shows his lighter side. Cool outro. ;D
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skub 😁
Thank you for your time folks 🤝
Slava